Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

The graph chart demonstrates the of number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Overall it is clear that total number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island

were the largest category while visitors staying on island were the least popular category.However visitors staying on cruise ships flactuates over the time period.

In 2010 visitors staying on cruise ships while visiting caribbean island accounted for the 0.2 millions its figure flactuates in 2014 its stood at 1 millions after that it figures rose sharply at 2 millions.Furthuremore visitors staying on island initially represented approximately at 0.7 millions, followed by this it figures rose in 2011 to 2015 at 1.5 millions then declined in 2016 at 1.3 millions overall it were accounted the smallest category at 1.5 millions in 2017.

In contrast, total number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island had the highest category at 1 millions in 2010,1.5 millions at 2012 in addition its level sharply increase throughout the time period at 3.5 millions of visitors

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the period and report several relevant figures, including cruise-ship visitors rising to 2 million in 2017 and island-staying visitors reaching about 1.5 million. However, the overview misidentifies the categories: the total is not a category comparable with the two visitor types, and island-staying visitors were not consistently the least popular; they exceeded cruise visitors in most years. The account also omits key comparisons, such as the total rising from 1 million to 3.5 million and cruise visitors overtaking island visitors in 2016. Some figures are inaccurate or unclear, including the 2012 total and the cruise figure for 2010. The response is 143 words, below the 150-word minimum; develop the overview and comparisons to cover the task more fully.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic paragraph structure: an introduction, an overview, and paragraphs describing the visitor groups and total. This gives the reader some sense of how the information is organised. However, progression within the body is difficult to follow because several trends are compressed into long, loosely connected sentences. For example, the sentence beginning “In 2010 visitors staying on cruise ships” moves from the starting figure to 2014 and then 2017 without clearly marking each stage. Linking phrases such as “Furthuremore” and “In contrast” are used, but the relationships they signal are not always clear or appropriate. Group the data more systematically and use accurate time references so comparisons are easier to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “accounted for,” “declined,” “rose sharply,” and “throughout the time period,” which helps communicate changes in the graph. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, making parts of the report awkward or unclear. For instance, “the largest category” does not accurately describe the total, while “its figure fluctuates” is not a natural way to report a past trend. Spelling errors such as “flactuates” and “Furthuremore,” along with inconsistent capitalisation of “Caribbean,” are noticeable. Aim for precise trend language and check spelling and word forms; this will make the comparisons clearer and more natural.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, and the reader can generally recognise the main trends being described. However, control is inconsistent, particularly in longer sentences, where errors in agreement, articles, tense, and sentence construction often make the meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “total number … were the largest category,” “its stood at 1 millions,” and “its level sharply increase.” Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, as in the final sentence, which reduces readability. Practise forming accurate past-tense sentences with a clear subject and verb, and use full stops to separate distinct stages or comparisons. More reliable control of these basic patterns would make your ideas easier to understand.

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