Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

THE LINE GRAPH ILLUSTRATES THE PORPORTION OF TOURISTS WHO VISITED ISLAN IN CARIBBEAN REGION IN 2010 AND 2010.

THE LINES ANT POINTS IN AVAILABLE GRAPH INDICATES THE CHOICE OF LIVING DURING THEIR VIST IN CARIBBEAN ISLAND AND TOTAL NUMBER OF VISITORS.

AT FIRST IT IS OBSERVED 1 MILLION TOURIST VISITED ISLAND AND THEIR PERCENTAGE INCREASE SHARPLY UPTO 1.5 MILLION IN 2012 AND THIS NUMBER INCREASE GRADUALLY CLIMBED UP 2 MILLION IN 2013,2.5 MILLION IN 2015 BUT STEADDLY CLIMMED TO 3.5 MILLION AROUND [redacted phone].

HOWEVER AT STARY PEOPLE EQUALLY PREFER TO STAY AT ISLAND AND STAY ON CRUISE SHIPS .LATER AFTER 2011 MORE PEOPLE CHOOSE TO INHABITED AT CRUISE SHIPS RATHER IN CONTRASTTO ISLAND.ON ONE HAND CONTINIOUSLY MORE AND PERSONS LOVE TO LIVE ON CRUISE SHIPS DURING THEIR VISIT AT CARIBBEAN ISLAND IN BETWEEN 2011.

FINALLY IT IS CONCLUDE THAT VISITORS RATE INCREASE BUT PEOPLES PERSONAL CHOICES ABOUT LIVING PLACES SHOWES UPS AND DOWN BUT DOMINATION BY THOSE WHO MAKE DECISION TO STAY AT ISLAND DURING VIST INCREASE GRADUALLY LATER JOINED BY CRUISE SHIP LOVERS .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You identify the overall rise in visitor numbers and mention both accommodation groups, so the response is relevant to the graph. However, the account only partially reports the main features, and several figures or comparisons are inaccurate: the total reaches 2.5 million in 2014, not 2015, and 3.5 million in 2017, not “around 2016-2016.” The claim that cruise-ship visitors overtook island visitors after 2011 is also incorrect; island stays remained higher through 2016, with cruise visitors exceeding them only in 2017. The overview that choices show “ups and down” is vague and does not clearly summarise the contrasting trends. Report the total and each category’s key changes accurately, then state the main comparison directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has separate paragraphs and uses signposts such as “At first,” “However,” and “Finally,” which gives it some visible organisation. Nevertheless, the progression is difficult to follow because the paragraphs do not consistently group the total trend and the two visitor categories, and some links are unclear. For example, “On one hand” is not followed by a corresponding “on the other hand,” while “Later after 2011” and “in between 2011” do not establish a clear time sequence. The final paragraph repeats the general idea of rising visitors without resolving the earlier comparisons. Organise the report into a clear introduction, overview, and detail paragraphs, and use time references and linking phrases only where their relationships are precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You attempt task-related vocabulary, including “total number of visitors,” “cruise ships,” “increase,” and “domination,” but the range is limited and several choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to interpret. Examples include “proportion” for the number of tourists, “choice of living” for accommodation, and “inhabited at cruise ships,” which is not a natural expression. Frequent spelling errors such as “porportion,” “vist,” and “continiously” also reduce clarity. Aim for accurate, conventional language for describing data and accommodation, and check spelling carefully. More precise verbs such as “rose,” “remained stable,” and “overtook” would help you describe the graph without relying on repeated forms of “increase.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

There are attempts to form longer sentences, but the range is limited and errors are frequent enough to make some relationships hard to understand. For instance, “At first it is observed 1 million tourist visited island” lacks a clear grammatical structure and has problems with articles and number agreement. In “this number increase gradually climbed,” the verb forms are combined incorrectly, while “people equally prefer to stay” does not fit the past-time reporting of the graph. Sentence boundaries and punctuation are also inconsistent, particularly around the long final sentence. Build accurate simple past-tense sentences first, then add subordinate clauses only when you can control their verb forms and punctuation.

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