Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The line graph illustrates the figures or visitors who visit a particular Caribbean sea between 2010 and 2017. Overall, Total number of visitors were recorded approximately 3.5 millions in 2017. Visitors staying on cruise ships increases significantly and , the visitors staying on island recorded increases but declined alomost at last.
It can be seen that, Total number of visitors who visits
caribbean sea were recorded 3.5 million from 2010 to 2017,and these visitors were starting from approximately 0.3 million and increases significnatly about to 3.5 million in 2017. Visitors staying on cruise top begins with about to 0.3 million in 2010 and increases to 0.5 miilion in 2011 and, declined again to 0.3 million in 2012 after that increases significantly to 2 millions in 2017.
Now we can seen that, visitors staying on island started about to 0.8 million in 2010 and, remains same figure from 2010 to 2011, then increases significantly to 1.5 million from 2011 to 2015, after that declined to 1.3 million in 2016, and then increases to 1.5 million in 2017.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify the overall rise in total visitors and describe the main patterns for both accommodation groups, so the response addresses the task and includes relevant comparisons. Several figures are accurately reported: cruise-ship visitors rise to 2 million in 2017, while island visitors reach 1.5 million in 2015, dip in 2016, and recover in 2017. However, the overview is unclear when it says the island figure “declined almost at last,” and the total series is described imprecisely: it starts at about 1 million, not 0.3 million, and reaches 3.5 million only in 2017. Make the overview more precise and distinguish the total from the two visitor categories to develop the key features more fully.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The response has a basic structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about cruise-ship visitors and then island visitors. This gives the reader some organisation, and time markers such as “in 2011” and “after that” help show sequence. However, progression is weakened by unclear or repetitive phrasing, including “It can be seen that” and “Now we can seen that,” and the second paragraph combines the total and cruise-ship data in a way that makes the figures difficult to follow. Use separate, clearly focused paragraphs and connect comparisons directly—for example, contrast the steady island figure with the faster cruise-ship growth. More accurate referencing and less mechanical linking would make the account easier to follow.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increases,” “declined,” “approximately,” and “visitors staying on cruise ships,” which allows you to describe the main trends. However, the range is limited and several word choices or collocations are inaccurate, sometimes making the meaning unclear. “Caribbean sea” misidentifies the island as a sea, while “figures or visitors” and “cruise top” are not suitable expressions. Spelling errors such as “alomost,” “significnatly,” and “miilion” also reduce accuracy. Build a more precise set of trend phrases, such as “the total number of visitors,” “rose steadily,” and “fell slightly,” and check spelling and collocations before finishing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You attempt both simple and longer sentences, using time clauses such as “after that” and “then,” but control is inconsistent. Subject–verb agreement errors appear in “Total number of visitors were” and “visitors who visits,” while tense and verb-form problems occur in “cruise ships increases” and “then increases.” Articles and sentence construction also need attention: “started about to 0.8 million” is not grammatically formed, and commas are often placed before conjunctions or after introductory phrases without a clear reason. These errors sometimes make relationships between figures harder to understand. Practise describing past data consistently in the past tense, and check agreement and sentence boundaries; for example, “The total rose from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017.”
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