Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-23

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The line graph shows that how many tourist's travelled to Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017 .

Accourding to the line graph between 2010 to 2012 more than 2million pupils travelled to Caribbean island and during this time many visitors stayed at island and travelled through cruise ships .

And after 2012 visitors started to visit more to this place between 2012 to 2016 moreover 2.5 million pupils visited to the Caribbean island accourding to line graph some are stayed their and some started to come back .

Now its big increase in tourist's that visited to Caribbean island accourding to line graph more over 1milliion of rise in tourists in one year so its a big rise .

Millions of pupils visited the Caribbean island betweeen 2010 to 2016 but in one year it rises more than 1 million of tourist's visited in one year thats a big difference according to the graph in 2017 .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response recognises the topic and refers to the period shown, but it reports the graph only minimally and does not give a clear, accurate overview of its main features. The claim that “more than 2million” tourists visited between 2010 and 2012 is incorrect: the total rose from about 1 million to 1.5 million. The statement that 2.5 million visited between 2012 and 2016 also misrepresents a period in which the total increased from about 1.5 million to 2.75 million. You do identify a sharp rise in 2017, but the increase was about 0.75 million, not more than 1 million. To improve, summarise the overall upward trend and compare the two visitor categories using accurate key figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

The response follows the years in roughly chronological order and uses basic linking expressions such as “And after 2012” and “moreover.” However, the ideas are not arranged into a clear report structure: there is no distinct overview, and the final two sections repeat the point that 2017 saw a large increase. Some connections are difficult to follow, particularly “some started to come back,” which does not clearly explain a trend in the graph. Organise the response into an introduction, an overview of the main trends, and a paragraph comparing the figures. Use linking words to show precise relationships, rather than adding them where the connection is unclear.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary is basic and repetitive, with “visited,” “tourists,” and “big rise” used to express most of the information. Some wording is also inaccurate for this chart: “pupils” refers to schoolchildren, not tourists, and “come back” does not clearly describe the visitor categories. Spelling errors such as “Accourding,” “betweeen,” and “milliion” further reduce control. The reader can generally identify the topic, but the limited range and imprecise choices make the report less clear and less suitable for academic description. Build a small set of accurate terms for describing totals, increases, and visitor types, and check spelling before submitting.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts longer sentences and uses time expressions, but grammatical control is inconsistent. For example, “The line graph shows that how many tourist's travelled” has an unnecessary “that” and an incorrect plural form, while “between 2010 to 2012” uses the wrong preposition pattern. Several sentences run together without clear punctuation, especially the sentence beginning “Now its big increase.” Articles and verb forms are also unreliable in phrases such as “visited to the Caribbean island.” These errors sometimes make relationships between ideas hard to understand. Practise accurate simple sentence patterns first, then combine them with controlled clauses using “while,” “whereas,” or “by.”

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