Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The line graph illustrates the percentage of tourists exploring a specific island betweed 2010 and 2017.

Overall we can see that the 3.5 millions of vistors has vist the island however 2 millions stayed on cruise ship and 1.5 staying on island.

In 2010 1 million of vistiors has vist the caribbean island however the figure steadily rose to the 1.5 in 2012 it significantly rising to 2 million in 2013 and 2.5 in 2014 furthrmore the figure has just reached to 2.75 till 2015 and remains same till 2016 however it faced a sharp rose to the peak of 3.5 million in 2017.

The percentage of vistors who staying on island is 0.8 in 2010 and it remains constant till 2011. However the percentage steadily rose to the 1.5 million in 2013 and remains same till 2015 where it face a little decline in 2016 of 1.3 and again rose to the 1.5 in 2017. Moreover the percentage of those who staying on ship is 0.3 in 2010 and it rose to 0.5 in 2011 and faces a decline of 0.3 in 2012 however it rose again and went upto 0.5 in 2013 and rising dramitcally to 1 million in 2014 however the figure continues rising and went upto 1.5 in 2016 and reaches the peak of 2 million in 2017.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You cover the overall total and both visitor categories, and the main upward trend is clear: the total rises from 1 million to 3.5 million, while cruise-ship visitors reach 2 million by 2017. You also identify the island-stayer plateau and the small dip in 2016. However, the opening calls the figures percentages, although the graph reports numbers of visitors in millions, and the overview’s wording makes the 3.5 million total and its components difficult to interpret. Some details are also imprecise: island visitors are about 1.25 million in 2012, not 1.5 million in 2013 as the stated point of increase suggests. A clearer overview and more precise reporting of key stages would strengthen the response.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction, an overview, a paragraph on the total, and a final paragraph comparing the two visitor groups. This gives the reader a generally coherent route through the information. Linking words such as “however,” “furthermore,” and “moreover” help signal changes and additions, but they are repeated frequently and sometimes make the long sentences feel mechanical. The final paragraph also combines many year-by-year details in one sentence, so the comparisons are harder to follow. Grouping the island and cruise-ship trends more clearly, and using shorter sentences to mark turning points, would improve progression and make the relationships between figures easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use relevant graph vocabulary, including “steadily rose,” “remains constant,” “decline,” and “peak,” which helps describe trends. However, the range and control are limited by repeated use of “figure,” “percentage,” and “rose,” and several word choices do not fit the data: the graph shows visitor numbers, not percentages. Spelling errors such as “betweed,” “vistors,” “furthrmore,” and “dramitcally” are noticeable and reduce the accuracy of the report. Some phrases are also unnatural, including “has vist the island” and “went upto.” Aim for precise terms such as “number of visitors,” “increased,” and “reached,” and check spelling and collocations carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and extended sentences, and the response uses clauses to connect changes over time. However, verb forms and sentence construction are often inaccurate, as in “3.5 millions of vistors has vist” and “the percentage of vistors who staying on island.” These should use a plural subject with an appropriate past-tense verb, and a correctly formed relative clause. There are also problems with articles, agreement, and prepositions, for example “rose to the 1.5” and “reaches the peak.” Long sentences joined repeatedly with “however” make punctuation and clause boundaries difficult to control. Use a consistent past tense, check subject–verb agreement, and divide sequences of changes into shorter sentences.

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