Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph below illustrate the number of visitors visited at caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

overall, there are 3 diffeent sign such as visitors staying on cruise ships, visitors staying on island and total respectively. In 2010 the number of visitors staying on cruise ships increase 0.25 to 0.5 in 2011 and again goes decrease to the shame position i:e 0.25 in 2012. Whereas, in 2010 the visitors staying on island reamins in the shame position in 2011 i:e 0.75 and raises to roughly 1.25 in 2012 and in the same date 2010 the total visitors got increases to 1.25 in 2011 and again get stand to 1.5 in 2012.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s three series and report some early figures, including cruise-ship visitors rising from about 0.25 million in 2010 to 0.5 million in 2011, then falling in 2012. However, the response addresses the task only partially: it stops at 2012 and gives no account of the substantial later growth or the overall pattern, such as the total reaching about 3.5 million by 2017. The opening does not provide a clear overview of the main trends. The response is also 39 words below the required minimum, leaving too little space to summarise and compare the data adequately. To improve, include a concise overview and select key figures from across the full period.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by a paragraph discussing the series, and linking words such as “Whereas” and “and” connect some information. However, the ideas do not progress through the full time period, and the long second paragraph combines several series and years in a way that makes comparisons difficult to follow. “In 2010” is repeated even when the sentence moves to 2011 and 2012, creating unclear references. Use separate paragraphs for an overview and the main details, then group related trends and move chronologically. More precise links such as “by contrast,” “meanwhile,” and “from 2012 onwards” would make the relationships clearer.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “visitors,” “cruise ships,” “total,” and “roughly,” so the reader can identify the subject and some quantities. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the report less clear, including “3 diffeent sign,” “the shame position,” and “got increases.” These are not natural ways to describe graph categories or changes. Use standard terms such as “three categories,” “remained unchanged,” “rose,” and “fell.” Also avoid repeating “visitors” where a clear reference such as “this figure” is possible. More accurate trend verbs and comparison phrases would help you describe the data precisely.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

The response attempts to combine information in longer sentences, but the structures are often faulty, and grammatical errors sometimes make the intended relationships difficult to understand. For example, “The graph below illustrate” has a subject–verb agreement error, while “the number of visitors … increase 0.25 to 0.5” has an incorrect verb form and an incomplete comparison pattern. The sentence beginning “Whereas” is also awkwardly joined to the preceding sentence, and punctuation around “i:e” is not appropriate. Practise accurate simple sentences first—for example, “The number rose from 0.25 million in 2010 to 0.5 million in 2011”—then add a small number of well-controlled complex comparisons.

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