Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The graph give information amount of visitors of the Caribbean island between 2010 to 2017.
Overall, Caribbean island was not popular among of tourists. In 2010 visitor who stayed by cruise were more then people who visited on island. However together both showed positive grow.
Tourists who used Cruise ships for traveling had some decrease in 2012 but from 2013 years started increase and peacked highest score in 2017. People prefer to enjoed on the island livining without ships had better numbers, from 2010 it had roughly 1 % millions . in 2016 had slightly dropped and decrease. Both together had sharp increase in 2017 years when total visitors were 3.5 millions.
Total both visitors gives us positive reports. After amount ot times ago visitor who traveld just alone were more common but in 2017 situation has changed and cruise ship visitors overtook them. Carribean island had positive grow between those times.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0
You identify the overall rise in visitor numbers and report several relevant features, including the cruise-ship decline in 2012, its subsequent growth, and the total reaching about 3.5 million in 2017. You also note the key change by the end, when cruise visitors overtook those staying on the island. However, the overview is partly unclear: saying the island “was not popular” is not supported by the graph, which shows visitor numbers increasing, and the 2010 comparison is reversed—the island-staying group was larger than the cruise group. Some figures are also imprecise, such as describing the island figure as “1 % millions.” Focus the overview on the overall increase and the contrasting trends, then report accurate comparisons and values.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5
The response has a recognisable structure, moving from an introduction and overview to details about each visitor group and the total. Linking words such as “However,” “from 2013,” and “After” show an attempt to connect ideas. Nevertheless, progression is uneven: the final paragraph repeats the general growth point rather than adding a clearly organised comparison, and some references are difficult to follow, as in “Total both visitors gives us positive reports.” The sequence of details also shifts between groups and totals without consistently guiding the reader. Use one paragraph for the overview and organise the body paragraphs by visitor type or by stages in the period; make each comparison explicit and avoid repeating the same conclusion.
Lexical Resource: Band 5.0
You attempt vocabulary relevant to describing trends, including “decrease,” “increase,” “sharp increase,” and “overtook,” which helps communicate the main movements. However, word choice and collocation are often inaccurate or unnatural, and some errors make the meaning harder to interpret. For example, “positive grow,” “peacked highest score,” and “positive reports” do not express the trends naturally; “livining” and “Carribean” also contain spelling errors. The repeated use of “visitors” and “increase” limits variety. Build a reliable set of chart-description phrases and check spelling and word forms. Prefer precise expressions such as “visitor numbers rose,” “reached a peak,” and “the total climbed to” rather than translating phrases literally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0
You use some simple and compound sentence forms, including a contrast with “However” and a time clause beginning “when,” so the response is not limited to isolated statements. However, errors in sentence structure and basic grammar occur throughout and sometimes obscure relationships between ideas. Examples include “The graph give information,” “both showed positive grow,” and “in 2016 had slightly dropped,” where agreement, verb construction, or a clear subject is missing. Articles and prepositions are also unreliable, as in “on the Caribbean island” and “between 2010 to 2017.” Practise forming complete sentences with an explicit subject and a consistent past-tense verb, and check agreement and prepositions. More accurate control of these patterns would make your comparisons easier to understand.
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