Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The graph below illustrate information the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean Island from 2010 to 2017. I will explain the information by selecting the main features and make comparisons. Overall, the number of tourists visiting a Caribbean Island [redacted phone]. and the millions of visitors are total is a peak point in given figure. the lowest point is visitors staying on cruise ships . Looking at the details, in 2010, the millions of visitors staying on cruise ships and the percentage is 2%, the visitors staying on island is 7% and the total is 10%. in [redacted phone] the visitors is 5% and the total is 7% in given figure.and last in 2013, the tourist is 35 and minor different is staying on island the percentage is 7% and last total is 10%. In addition, in [redacted phone], the tourist on cruise ships is 6% in given diagram and the little diffrence is the Island and the total id 26%.In [redacted phone] the visitors is minor diffrent is 9%, and the total is 30% in the diagram.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

The response identifies the chart’s subject and time period, and it attempts to describe both visitor categories and the total. However, the overview is unclear: calling the total a “peak point” and cruise-ship visitors the “lowest point” does not explain the main trend across the years. Most figures are misread or expressed as percentages, although the graph reports millions; for example, the 2010 values are about 0.25 million on cruise ships, 0.75 million staying on the island, and 1 million in total. Later claims such as “the tourist is 35” and a total of “30%” are also inaccurate. To improve, give a clear overview of the overall rise and report a few accurate comparisons in millions.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some basic organisation: an opening, an attempted overview, and two paragraphs covering successive periods. Phrases such as “Looking at the details” and “In addition” show an effort to guide the reader. However, the progression is difficult to follow because several years are grouped together without clear comparisons, and the links between figures and categories are often unclear. The overview is a fragment rather than a complete summary, and the final paragraph does not clearly connect its figures to the earlier account. Use one paragraph for a concise overview and organise the details chronologically, stating each category and its value explicitly. This would make the information easier to track and reduce the impression of disconnected statements.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “tourists,” “visitors,” “cruise ships,” “island,” and “total,” so the subject is recognisable. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and several expressions are imprecise or unsuitable for describing a line graph. Repeated phrases such as “in given figure” and “minor different” do not communicate comparisons naturally; “percentage” is also used where the data are given in millions. Spelling errors such as “diffrence” and “diffrent” further reduce accuracy. Build a small set of precise trend and comparison terms, and use the chart’s units consistently. For example, describe figures as “million visitors” and changes as “rose,” “remained stable,” or “fell slightly.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts several sentence forms, including an opening description and time-based clauses, but control is inconsistent. The first sentence has subject–verb disagreement (“graph … illustrate”), while the overview contains an incomplete construction: “Overall, the number … 2010-2017.” Other examples include “the millions of visitors are total is a peak point” and “the tourist on cruise ships is 6%,” where sentence structure and agreement make the intended meaning hard to follow. Punctuation and sentence boundaries are also unreliable, particularly where clauses run together after “figure.” Practise writing complete subject–verb sentences with a clear comparison, and check articles, agreement, and punctuation. A simple accurate structure is preferable to a longer sentence that obscures the data.

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