Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The graph demostrates the number of tourists visiting a certain Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Overall, this graph compared the total people visited to the island, people stayed on cruise ships and people stayed on island. Most of the people travel to island try to stay on cruise consequently, they are increasing repiadly with period of time time while the visitors stay on island was flactuating continously.

To begin with, the total people who visited to this island in this period. At starting it was about one million visitor of this island inn 2010 but it increased dramatically and in 2014 it was accounted about 2.5 million visitor and it remain approsimataly same at the end of the years year 2016 but then it was increased suddenly and contain 3.5 million visitors in 2017.

Now, comperision between visitors how stay at island by cruise ship or on island. At starting most of the people liked to stay on island and it is accounted as 0.75 million visitors. after that it rose in 2011 and In 2013 it become 1.5 million visitors and remain constant for three years and then show a slight decrease in 2016 and then in 2017 it again come at same place. However, most of the people dream to stay at cruise ships consequentaly, the fluctured first then showed a encladible increase from 2013 to 2017. At starting it was accounted as 0.25 milllion and at the end it was recorded as 2 million people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover the main components and give a clear overview of the overall rise, the cruise-ship increase and the comparatively stable island-stay figures. The total is accurately described as rising from about 1 million to 3.5 million, with a pause around 2015–16. You also report the island-stay series’ peak and later dip. This meets the task well, with some features more fully reported than others. However, the overview says visitors staying on the island were “flactuating continously,” which overstates the variation: this series is mostly stable after rising, with only a modest dip. The claim that most visitors increasingly chose cruise ships is also imprecise: island stays remained higher until 2016, when cruise-ship visitors overtook them. Clarifying these comparisons would make the summary more complete and precise.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The response has a recognisable structure: an introduction and overview are followed by paragraphs on the total and the two accommodation types. Sequencing phrases such as “To begin with,” “Now,” and “However” help signal shifts, and the reader can generally follow the time progression. However, some links are mechanical or unclear, and the overview’s comparison is difficult to interpret. The final paragraph combines both accommodation series, while the total is treated separately; clearer grouping or a more deliberate comparison between the two series would improve progression. Several sentences also run together or use unclear references, such as “it remain approximately same at the end of the years year 2016.” Use concise sentences and connect each comparison explicitly to its subject.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-relevant vocabulary, including “increased dramatically,” “remain constant,” “slight decrease,” and “visitors,” so the main trends are usually understandable. However, the range and control are limited by repeated basic wording and frequent inaccurate choices or forms. Phrases such as “people dream to stay at cruise ships,” “come at same place,” and “showed a encladible increase” are not natural ways to describe chart data, and misspellings such as “demostrates,” “flactuating,” and “comperision” are noticeable. Aim for precise reporting language and check spelling and collocations. For example, use “visitors staying aboard cruise ships” and “rose steadily” rather than conversational or unclear expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including time clauses and contrasts, and the overall meaning can usually be recovered. However, errors in sentence structure and basic grammatical forms are frequent enough to make some sentences difficult to read. Examples include “the total people who visited to this island,” “it was accounted about 2.5 million visitor,” and “it remain approximately same.” These show problems with verb forms, articles, plurals and sentence construction. There are also awkward clause connections, as in “Most of the people travel to island try to stay on cruise consequently.” Practise forming complete clauses with a clear subject and verb, and maintain past tense when describing the historical data. More accurate control of these patterns would make your range of sentence forms effective.

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