Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The numbers of tourist visiting in caribbean island in 2010 was simlear but in 2011 there is a diffrence in visitors staying on cruise shipe upto 0.5 percent visitores and on another side of it .The visitors staying on island is just increase upto 0.7 persent and the total forme of it is 1.3 persent and in 2012 to 2013 there is a massive form of discrease in visitores staying on cruise shipes . And there is also a layoff of visitores staying on island and the total forme is increase in 2012 to 2013 is 1.5 to 2 persent of it .And in 2014 to 2016 there is a higest of persentage of increasing in visitors staying on cruise shipes . And at another side visitores staying on island is also increase upto 1.5 persentage of it and . total increase in upto 2.7 percent of it . And in 2017 there are both are

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the chart’s three categories and attempt to describe changes over time, including the rise in cruise-ship visitors and the overall total. However, the account is incomplete and several figures or trends are inaccurate: island visitors were about 0.75 million in 2011, not 0.7 percent, and cruise-ship visitors rose from about 0.25 million in 2012 to 0.5 million in 2013 rather than decreasing. The response also stops before explaining what happened in 2017, and it gives no clear overview of the main pattern, such as the total rising overall and cruise visitors becoming the larger group by the end. Select the key trends accurately and summarise them clearly before adding supporting figures.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is some chronological organisation: you move from 2010–2011 through 2012–2013 and then 2014–2017, and phrases such as “in 2014 to 2016” help signal time periods. However, the response is largely one continuous sequence, with no clear paragraphing or overview to guide the reader. Connections between ideas are often unclear, especially in “and on another side of it” and “there is also a layoff,” so it is difficult to tell which category or comparison is being discussed. The final sentence is unfinished, which interrupts the progression. Group the information into an overview and two focused detail paragraphs, and use clear links such as “by contrast,” “meanwhile,” and “overall” only where the relationship is precise.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant chart vocabulary, including “visitors,” “total,” “increase,” and “percentage,” and you attempt to compare the three categories. However, the vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several choices make the meaning difficult to follow. “Massive form of discrease” does not express the chart’s actual trend, while “layoff of visitors” is not an appropriate way to describe a change in visitor numbers. There are also frequent spelling problems, including “visitores,” “shipe,” and “simlear.” Use accurate terms such as “number of visitors,” “rose,” “remained stable,” and “declined,” and refer to the figures as millions of visitors rather than percentages.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to connect ideas in longer sentences using “and,” “but,” and time phrases, but sentence structures are mostly repetitive and often difficult to interpret. Errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries appear throughout, as in “The numbers of tourist … was simlear” and “the visitors staying on island is just increase.” Several clauses are joined without clear punctuation, and the final phrase, “there are both are,” is incomplete. These problems sometimes obscure the intended comparisons. Practise forming clear past-tense sentences with a subject and verb—for example, “The total rose from 1 million in 2010 to 3.5 million in 2017”—and separate each main comparison with appropriate punctuation.

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