Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-04

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Given graph shows the data of tourists on a particular Caribean island from the year 2010 to 2017. Further it distiguishes the visitors in two catagories, one who stay on cruise ships and others who stay on island and also depicts their number in combine which increases gradually throughout this time period.

First, we will discuss about the tourists who stay on cruise ships. In 2010 they were recorded 250 thousand, thier numers rose to 500 thousand in 2011 again came to 250 in 2012 than again rose to 500 thousand in 2013 and than continously incresead and reached to 1 million in 2014, 1.5 million in 2016 and finally 2 million 2017.

0.75 million visitors stayed on island in 2010, sustained there till 2011 than in creased to 1.5 million in 2013 and sustained there till 2017 with a fluctuation in 2016 when thier numbers decreased to 1.25 million.

In combine, there were 1 million tourist who came there in 2010 which showed the continous growth till 2017 when they reached to 3.5 million. in year 2016 to 17 they were most sharp rise almost from 2.75 million to 3.5.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You cover all three series and give a clear overall trend: the combined total rises from 1 million to 3.5 million, while cruise-ship visitors increase markedly. Most figures are accurately reported, including the 2016 dip in island-staying visitors. This gives the response a solid overview and relevant comparisons. However, some details are incomplete or imprecise: the island figure is described as remaining at 1.5 million “till 2017,” although it falls to 1.25 million in 2016 before returning to 1.5 million. The total is said to grow continuously, but it is unchanged at 2.75 million in 2015 and 2016. More precise reporting of these exceptions, alongside a clearer comparison of the two visitor groups, would make the account more fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The response has a generally logical structure: an opening overview is followed by separate discussion of cruise-ship visitors, island visitors and the total. This makes the main categories easy to locate, and time markers such as “in 2010,” “in 2016” and “finally” help establish sequence. However, the progression is somewhat mechanical, with repeated chronological listing rather than a more integrated comparison of trends. Some connections are awkward or unclear, as in “In combine,” and the final sentence begins with a lower-case “in” after a full stop. The overview also combines several points in a long opening sentence. Use clearer linking phrases and group related changes—for example, contrasting the steady rise in cruise visitors with the relative stability of island visitors—to improve flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for describing data, including “rose,” “reached,” “decreased” and “fluctuation,” and the reader can generally understand the trends. However, the range and control are limited by repeated basic wording and several inaccurate or misspelled forms, such as “distiguishes,” “catagories,” “continously” and “incresead.” Some expressions are also unnatural for a graph report: “tourists who stay on cruise ships” and “In combine” would be better expressed more precisely. Choose standard reporting collocations such as “the number of visitors staying…” and “combined total.” Check spelling carefully, and vary verbs and phrases where appropriate; this would make the description more precise and fluent without requiring unnecessarily complex vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentence forms, and the main trends are usually understandable. However, control is uneven: several sentences contain faulty structures or punctuation that make the reader work harder. For example, “In 2010 they were recorded 250 thousand” has an incorrect passive construction; write “The figure was 250,000 in 2010.” The opening sentence also lacks an article in “Given graph,” and “First, we will discuss about” uses an unnecessary preposition and an unsuitable first-person construction. Run-on sequencing in the cruise-ship sentence, with repeated “than” clauses, further weakens accuracy. Use complete, clearly punctuated sentences and consistent past-tense reporting forms. More reliable control of articles, sentence boundaries and clause structure would strengthen the response.

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