Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The pictorial representation depicts the making process manufacturing instant noodles.

Overall, A Glance at the graphs reveals that, the process have eight main primary steps. this is the linear process.

The first steps involves there are making process start with storage silos following flour connverted to mixer water and oil after that dough sheets a

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the subject as the manufacture of instant noodles and recognises that it is a linear process with eight main steps. However, it reports almost none of the stages shown: the account stops after mentioning storage silos, the mixer, water and oil, and dough sheets, without describing the later production of strips and noodle discs, cooking and drying, or the addition of vegetables, spices, cups, labels and sealing. The overview is also vague and does not summarise the process from flour delivery to finished cups. The required minimum length is not met, leaving the task substantially incomplete. To improve, give a concise overview and describe the full sequence using the diagram’s labels.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a description of the initial stages. The phrases “Overall” and “The first steps” signal this progression, and “after that” attempts to connect stages. However, the account ends abruptly at “dough sheets a,” so the sequence is not carried through to its conclusion. The overview and process description are also not clearly separated into developed paragraphs, and the links between the early stages are difficult to follow. Use a clear paragraph for the overview and another for the stages, then connect each step in order with accurate sequencing expressions such as “next,” “subsequently,” and “finally.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant process vocabulary, including “storage silos,” “mixer,” “water and oil,” and “dough sheets,” which shows awareness of the diagram’s subject. It also attempts a formal opening with “pictorial representation.” However, the range is very limited because only the first few stages are named, and several expressions are inaccurate or awkward: “making process manufacturing” is redundant, while “A Glance at the graphs” is unsuitable for a process diagram. “Converted to mixer” does not clearly express what happens to the flour. Use precise stage terms from the diagram, such as “flour is transferred to the mixer,” and include vocabulary for the later stages, including “dough strips,” “noodle discs,” “cooking,” “drying,” and “sealing.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts an overview and a longer sentence describing the first stages, but grammatical control is weak and the sentence structure is difficult to follow. For example, “the process have eight main primary steps” has subject–verb disagreement and an unnecessary combination of “main” and “primary.” The sequence sentence, “The first steps involves there are making process start with storage silos,” contains several competing structures, making the intended meaning unclear. Capitalisation and punctuation are also inconsistent, as in “Overall, A Glance” and “this is the linear process.” Aim for complete, controlled sentences, for example: “Overall, the process consists of eight stages, beginning with flour storage and ending with sealed cups of noodles.” Then use consistent present simple or passive forms to describe each stage.

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