Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
THE DIAGRAM SHOWS MANUFACTURING OF NOODLES BY NOODLES MANUFACTURING COMPANY.NOW WE DISCUSS THE METOD OF INSTANT NOODLES MENUFACTURING METHOD.FIRST OF ALL FOR NOODLES MANUFACTURING THE FLOOR IS BROUGHT TO STORAGE SILOS BY THE HELP OF TANKS WHERE IT IS STORED. AFTER THAT IT IS BROUGHT TO MIXER WHERE IT IS MIXED WITH WATER AND OIL. AFTER THE MIXING,IT IS BROUGHT TO DOUGH SHEETWITH THE HELP OF ROLLER. AFER THIS IT IS PASSED TROUGH DOUGH STRIPS AND THEN CONVERTED INTO NOODLES DISC. THEN IT IS COOKED INTO OIL WITH VEDETABLE AND OTHER SPECIES.THEN THIS THE PROCESS OF FILLING STARTS. NOODLES ARE FILLED INTO CUPS WITH THE HELP OF MACHINERY. AFTER THE FILLING THE SEALING AND LABELING PROCESS STARTS WHICH IS LAST SATGE OF INSTANT NOODLES MANUFACTURING. NOW CUPS FILLED WITH NOODLES ARE LABELLED BY MACHINERY.WHEN LABELLING OF CUPS IS COMPLETED THEN THESE CUPS ARE SEALED WHICH IS THEN DELIEVER TO THE COUSTMERS ACCORDING TO THIER NEES. IN THIS WAY, THE INSTANT NOODLES ARE MANUFACTURED
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from the storage of flour to the final packaging. However, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks a clear overview or summary of the process as a whole. While the key stages are identified, the response would benefit from a more analytical approach, such as grouping the stages into logical phases (e.g., preparation, processing, and packaging). The inclusion of 'vegetable and other species' is a slight misinterpretation of the diagram, which likely refers to seasoning or flavoring. To improve, ensure you provide a clear introductory overview and focus on the most significant features of the process rather than listing every step in a linear, repetitive fashion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The response is written as a single block of text, which significantly hinders readability and logical progression. While there is a chronological sequence, the lack of paragraphing makes it difficult for the reader to distinguish between the different stages of production. Cohesive devices are used, but they are often repetitive (e.g., 'After that', 'After this', 'Then'). To reach a higher band, you should organize your report into clear paragraphs—for instance, one for the preparation of the dough and another for the cooking and packaging stages. Using a wider variety of linking words and phrases would also improve the flow of the text.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'brought' and 'mixed'. There are also several spelling errors, such as 'METOD', 'MENUFACTURING', 'FLOOR' (instead of flour), 'VEDETABLE', 'SPECIES' (instead of spices), 'SATGE', and 'DELIEVER'. These errors are frequent and occasionally distract the reader. To improve, you should focus on using more precise technical vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'conveyed', 'processed', 'integrated', or 'automated'. Expanding your vocabulary and paying closer attention to spelling will significantly enhance the quality of your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The response consists almost entirely of simple sentences, which limits the grammatical range. There are frequent errors in punctuation, such as missing spaces after commas and periods, and issues with article usage (e.g., 'to mixer', 'into oil'). Subject-verb agreement and word order are also inconsistent at times. While the meaning is generally clear, the lack of complex sentence structures and the high frequency of basic grammatical errors prevent the response from reaching a higher band. Incorporating more complex structures, such as passive voice (e.g., 'The flour is conveyed...'), would be highly appropriate for a process description.
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