Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 6.0)
The figure shows the production of instant noodles and various steps involved in the making process.
Overall, in first phase the raw materials from silos after the mixing with oil and water change to dough sheets, dough strips, discs respectively. Then vegetables, spices are added and then labelled.
After the raw materials come from silos they are converted into dough sheets, dough strips, noodle discs respectively after being mixed with oil and water then the noodle dics are introduced with cooking oil and then they are dried. In the next stage the vegetables and spices are added to it and they are put into the cup shaped container so that they can be sent for the labelling process to begin and after this step they are ready to be sold in the market .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the score. While you have identified the main stages of the process, the description is somewhat repetitive and lacks the analytical depth required for a higher band. You have successfully outlined the sequence from raw materials to the final product, but the explanation of the process is quite basic. To improve, ensure you reach the word count by providing more detailed descriptions of the transformation stages (e.g., the specific temperatures or the nature of the drying process) and ensure you clearly highlight the key features of the diagram.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The response is organized into two short paragraphs, which is acceptable, but the flow between ideas is somewhat mechanical. You use basic cohesive devices like 'Then', 'After', and 'In the next stage', which helps the reader follow the sequence, but the overall progression feels a bit disjointed due to the repetitive sentence structure. To improve, try to vary your linking words and use more sophisticated referencing to connect the stages of the process more fluidly. The paragraphing is sufficient, but the lack of a clear, distinct overview sentence at the beginning makes the structure feel less professional.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
The vocabulary used is adequate for the task but remains quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic terms like 'making process', 'raw materials', and 'added'. There is little attempt to use more precise, academic vocabulary related to manufacturing processes (e.g., 'conveyor belt', 'automated', 'packaging', 'subsequent'). While the meaning is clear, the lack of variety and the repetition of words like 'dough' and 'process' prevent a higher score. Expanding your range of synonyms and using more specific terminology for industrial processes would significantly enhance your lexical score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are noticeable errors in punctuation and phrasing. For example, 'in first phase' should be 'in the first phase', and the sentence structure in the second paragraph is quite long and run-on, which makes it difficult to read. There are also minor errors in article usage and preposition choice. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they occur frequently enough to limit the score. Focusing on sentence variety and ensuring correct subject-verb agreement will help improve your accuracy.
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