Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-05

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

First of all take floor from good shop after that you will go to noodles s factory and will start process of making noodles . Fristly you will take floor after that take put the water of floor and mix them nicely in mixture machine . Secondly Factory’s people put the floor in machine which will long pipe type making noodles . Thirdly However noodles will put source of water for two hours and At the end people will give rest to noodles and one machine which packs the packet . The workes of the factory will put the noodles one big jar and one machine will pack the noodles slowly however noodles dont break . At the end Applies of factory will check all the packets of noodles . One specific bus which came in factory and put all packets of noodles then it gave to shops for selling

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response attempts to describe the manufacturing process but fails to adopt an appropriate academic tone. Instead of an objective summary of the diagram, the text uses a narrative, instructional style ('you will go', 'you will take'), which is unsuitable for an IELTS Academic Task 1. While the main stages are mentioned, the description is often vague (e.g., 'source of water', 'one machine') and lacks the precision required to report on a technical process. The response does not provide a clear overview or highlight the key stages effectively, resulting in a disjointed summary that misses the requirement to report on the process objectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The response lacks logical paragraphing, appearing as a single block of text. While some basic cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all', 'Secondly', and 'At the end', they are often used incorrectly or mechanically. The progression of ideas is confusing, particularly in the middle section where the sequence of the process becomes difficult to follow. Referencing is also problematic; for example, the use of 'however' is consistently misused, as it does not signal a contrast in the context provided. The overall structure is disjointed, making it challenging for the reader to follow the manufacturing stages.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary is very limited and often inaccurate. There are frequent spelling errors, such as 'floor' instead of 'flour', 'source' instead of 'sauce', and 'workes' instead of 'workers'. The word choice is basic and repetitive, failing to convey the technical nature of the process. Phrases like 'good shop' and 'long pipe type' are informal and imprecise. The student struggles to use appropriate terminology for the manufacturing context, which significantly hinders the clarity of the report. A wider range of vocabulary related to industrial processes is needed to improve the score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede communication. There is a lack of control over basic sentence structures, with many run-on sentences and incorrect verb tenses. Punctuation is largely absent or misused, and there are consistent errors in subject-verb agreement and article usage (e.g., 'noodles is factory', 'Applies of factory'). The attempt to use complex structures is unsuccessful, leading to confusion. The writing relies heavily on simple, error-prone sentences, and the lack of control over basic grammar makes the text difficult to read and understand.

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