Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram below shows the process through which noodles are manufactured. This process consist of 8 stages from storing flour to labeling and sealing.

In the first step, bulk of flour is stored in a storage silos which is then move to mixture process in which oil and water is mixed with flour. After that it is converted into dough which is moved on a dough sheet. A dough sheet is connected with the machine that contain dough strip, dough moved through those dough strips which in which dough converted into straw shape material which is known as noodle.

After this process, strip machine is connected to noodle discs machine in which noodles convert into square shape, after that it moved for cooking where noodles is cooked in oil and moved for drying purpose. After all this procedure, noodles goes through a process of packing in which they are packed in a cup with some vegetables and species. And then move toward labeling and sealing process where all the cup are sealed and labeled and move to market for sale.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

You have successfully identified the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from the initial storage of flour to the final labeling and sealing. You have covered all parts of the diagram, which is a strength. However, the response lacks a clear overview or summary of the process, which is essential for a high band score in Academic Task 1. To improve, you should include an introductory sentence that highlights the overall nature of the process (e.g., it is a linear, multi-stage industrial process). Additionally, ensure you clearly distinguish between the preparation, cooking, and packaging phases to provide a more structured summary of the information provided in the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The response is generally coherent, and the progression of the process is logical. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In the first step', 'After that', and 'After all this procedure' to guide the reader through the stages. However, the paragraphing is insufficient; the entire body of the response is contained in one large paragraph. Breaking the text into logical paragraphs—for example, separating the preparation phase from the cooking and packaging phases—would significantly improve the structure. Additionally, some referencing is slightly repetitive, and the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words to connect the steps more fluidly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to describe the process clearly. You use relevant technical terms like 'silos', 'dough', 'labeling', and 'sealing'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'bulk of flour' (should be 'the bulk of the flour' or 'large quantities of flour') and 'species' (likely meant 'spices'). The range is somewhat limited, and you rely on basic verbs like 'move' and 'convert' repeatedly. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise verbs such as 'transferred', 'processed', 'transformed', or 'distributed' to add variety and sophistication to your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally affect the clarity of your writing. For instance, there are issues with subject-verb agreement ('process consist', 'machine that contain', 'all the cup are sealed') and article usage ('in a storage silos', 'on a dough sheet'). Additionally, some sentences are slightly awkward, such as 'dough moved through those dough strips which in which dough converted'. To improve, focus on ensuring that your verbs agree with their subjects and pay closer attention to the use of articles and prepositions. Increasing the variety of your sentence structures while maintaining accuracy will help you achieve a higher score.

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