Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-11
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
This diagram shoes the instant noodles which are manufactured step by step.
firstly, storage silos required for flour which is step one, on the next stage we move forword for mixture at this time rollers are required for mix the water and oil together double sheet is attached in the rolling process for better result , furthermore are the mixure going in to the dough strips which makes the noodles discs in the round shape and all the disc are unique they move for the upcoming process which is the sixth step , here all the mixure are going for drying that process observed all the cooking oil and all the mixure convert into the cups after drying process and include all the vegetables and spices into the cups after this all the process labelling is attched on the cups and also sealing all the cups , on the finel stage they move forward all these cup into the market for sealing.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the process of manufacturing instant noodles, but it fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the main features effectively. The description is fragmented and lacks a logical summary of the stages. While the response covers the steps, the lack of a clear introduction and the failure to group the stages into logical phases (e.g., preparation, processing, and packaging) makes the information difficult to follow. The description of the drying and packaging stages is particularly unclear, and the mention of 'market for sealing' at the end is factually confusing based on the diagram provided. To improve, you should provide a clear overview sentence and structure the report into distinct, logical paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which hinders readability and logical progression. There is a lack of effective paragraphing to separate the different stages of the process. While some cohesive devices like 'firstly', 'furthermore', and 'on the next stage' are used, they are often used incorrectly or in a repetitive, mechanical way. The flow of ideas is disjointed, and the transition between the drying process and the final packaging is confusing. To improve, you must use paragraph breaks to group related steps and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link sentences more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic terms like 'process', 'stage', and 'mixture'. There are several instances of word-choice errors, such as 'shoes' instead of 'shows', 'forword' instead of 'forward', and 'observed' instead of 'absorbs'. The phrasing 'all the mixure are going for drying' is awkward and lacks the precision required for a technical process description. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise verbs and nouns related to manufacturing, such as 'conveyed', 'extruded', 'dehydrated', or 'automated'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that often impede clarity. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'all the mixure are'), incorrect preposition usage, and run-on sentences that lack proper punctuation. The sentence structure is largely simple or poorly constructed, with very few attempts at complex sentences. For instance, 'all the process labelling is attched on the cups and also sealing all the cups' is grammatically incoherent. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensuring each sentence has a clear subject and verb, and work on using commas and periods correctly to separate distinct ideas.
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