Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-12
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
The given diagram illustrates the process of making instant noodles. It is clear from the chart that the process have several stages, it starts from storage silos and ends with labeling and sealing.
In first step the flour is commute from storage silos and it mixed with water and oil in mixer, in next step it rolls from rollers and became dough sheet. After it became strips and next became noodles discs. In step 6 it is cooking and drying and ready for filing in cups in which already vegetables and spices are included.
At last, the cups with noodles are ready for labeling and sealing. This whole process is done through one machine.
In summary, the process have pass through several stages and the most prominent is labeling and sealing, apart from this making dough sheets is also an important part because after it the main thigs for making noodles are done.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from raw materials to the final packaging. However, the description is somewhat superficial. While you mention the stages, you fail to provide a clear overview of the process as a whole, such as noting that it is a linear, automated sequence. The summary paragraph is weak, as it focuses on labeling and sealing rather than synthesizing the entire process. To improve, ensure you clearly group the stages (e.g., preparation, processing, and packaging) to provide a more analytical summary of the diagram's information.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite mechanical and repetitive (e.g., 'In first step', 'in next step', 'At last'). The transitions between sentences are often abrupt, and the logical flow is hindered by awkward phrasing. For example, the final paragraph attempts to summarize but fails to connect the ideas effectively, instead focusing on minor details like 'making dough sheets'. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear topic sentence would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and often inaccurate. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'commute' instead of 'conveyed' or 'transported', and 'filing' instead of 'filling'. The phrase 'main thigs' contains a spelling error and is too informal for an academic report. While you successfully use some process-related terms like 'storage silos', 'dough sheet', and 'labeling', the overall range is insufficient to convey the information with precision. You should focus on learning specific collocations related to industrial processes and manufacturing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Subject-verb agreement is a recurring issue, such as 'the process have several stages' and 'the process have pass'. There are also issues with sentence structure, such as 'it rolls from rollers and became dough sheet', which lacks proper tense consistency and prepositional accuracy. While you attempt some complex sentences, they are often faulty. To reach a higher band, you need to focus on consistent verb tenses (using the present simple for processes) and ensuring subject-verb agreement throughout your writing.
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