Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-15

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram illustrates the manufacturing of instant noodles has being made in a industry.The picture displays the stages of how noodles manufactured in a factory.

There are multiple ways of making the noodles.Firstly,the storage truck provides the flour into two large storage silos box which has round shape on its top view.Flour is transferred through small pipes.Secondly,items which are stored in silos has being given to mixer machine,beside that water,oil has been shared to mixer box.At the bottom view of mixer storage rollers are attached with it.Dough sheets and dough strips has the path to give materials from round shape box into noodles discs.Next to discs,the noodles pieces go around the ovall shape for cooking and drying.Moreover,vegetables plus spices are added into noodles through small round packets.In a nut shell, the boxes are ready to sell,by providing the labelling on the packets which are fully packed with sealing.Also,the below diagram depicts the noodles boxes which are completely manufactured.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from storage to packaging. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview or summary of the process as a whole. While the key stages are identified, the explanation of how the materials are transformed is occasionally unclear, such as the vague reference to 'dough sheets and dough strips'. To improve, you should focus on providing a more cohesive summary of the entire process in the introduction and ensuring that the transition between stages is described with greater precision and clarity.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the sequence of events. You use some cohesive devices like 'Firstly', 'Secondly', and 'Next', which provide a basic structure. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes disjointed, and the use of referencing is occasionally confusing (e.g., 'beside that water, oil has been shared to mixer box'). The paragraphing is present but could be more effectively used to separate the distinct phases of the manufacturing process. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one would enhance the overall coherence.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite repetitive and lacks precision. You rely on basic terms like 'items', 'things', and 'box' rather than more specific technical vocabulary appropriate for a process description. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'shared to mixer box' and 'path to give materials'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise terminology related to industrial processes, such as 'conveyed', 'incorporated', 'extruded', or 'automated'. Expanding your range of verbs and nouns will make your writing more professional and descriptive.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'has being made', 'items... has being given', and 'dough sheets... has the path' are grammatically incorrect. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and there is a lack of complex sentence forms. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and attempt to use a wider variety of complex sentence structures, such as passive voice constructions, which are essential for describing industrial processes.

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