Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram illustrates the work of instant noodles fast food manufactured.
Firstly the starting of manufacturing the instant noodles the first process is storage silos are deliver flour and the second process is started to mix the water or oil with flour and the rollers are rolling to produce the dough sheets and dough sheets are cutting in dough strips and the fifth process is strips are going to noodles discs and the noodle discs are get the sixth conveyor this conveyor are cooking under oil and drying and the next step is adding the vegetables and spices in the cups and the last conveyor belt is working the labelling in the noodles cups and the last machine is work to sealing the cups because the noodles are not damage or expired in the fast pierod so the noodles cups are ready to eat and going to selling in the markets
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from storage to final packaging. However, the report lacks a clear overview or summary of the process, which is essential for Task 1. The description is presented as a single, long, run-on sentence, which makes it difficult to follow the logical progression of the stages. While the key steps are mentioned, the lack of paragraphing and the absence of a clear introduction or summary mean the information is not well-organized or fully developed. To improve, you should group the stages into logical paragraphs (e.g., preparation, processing, and packaging) and provide a brief overview of the entire process in the introduction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response is written as one single, continuous paragraph, which significantly hinders coherence. There is a lack of logical paragraphing to separate the different stages of the process. While some linking words like 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'the last' are used, they are repetitive and mechanical. The flow of ideas is disrupted by the lack of punctuation; the entire text is essentially one long sentence, making it difficult for the reader to identify where one step ends and the next begins. Using a variety of cohesive devices and clear paragraph breaks is necessary to improve the logical flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'started', 'going', and 'work'. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as 'the work of instant noodles fast food manufactured' and 'the noodles are not damage or expired in the fast pierod'. These errors indicate a limited range of vocabulary and some confusion regarding word forms and collocations. To achieve a higher band score, you should aim to use more precise technical vocabulary related to manufacturing processes, such as 'conveyed', 'processed', 'automated', or 'packaged', and ensure that word forms are used correctly in context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical control is weak. The entire response consists of a single, run-on sentence, which is a major error in punctuation and sentence structure. There are frequent errors in verb tense and subject-verb agreement, such as 'storage silos are deliver flour' and 'the rollers are rolling'. Additionally, the use of articles and prepositions is often incorrect or missing. The response lacks complex sentence structures, relying instead on a repetitive string of clauses joined by 'and'. To improve, you must focus on using full stops to create distinct sentences and practice using a mix of simple and complex grammatical structures accurately.
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