Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

today my topic is how to manufacture a instant noodles firsts flour will fill in the storage soils . Then flour move to mixer where emoplyee first add a water and then he add a oil to make a good dough when this process is complete . Then dough move through the roller which make the dough sheets . After this the dough sheet mover from the roller strippers that make a dough strips . Then the strips go to a mechanism where dough strips convert into a noodles discs then they spray a cooking oil on the noodles discs and drying the oil for the noodles discs that make the noodles discs hard . Then it move from the next step where noodles discs add into plastics cup and then add a vegetables and spices for more taste then it move for the next step where they do a labeling and sealing it properly to send a noodles safe to a shops .

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from flour storage to final packaging. However, it lacks an overview or summary of the process, which is essential for Task 1. The description is purely sequential and lacks a formal structure, such as an introduction or a concluding summary. The information is presented as a list of steps rather than a cohesive report. To improve, you should group the stages into logical phases (e.g., preparation, processing, and packaging) and provide a clear overview of the entire manufacturing cycle in the opening paragraph.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response is written as a single, long paragraph, which makes it difficult to follow. While you use transition words like 'then', 'after this', and 'finally', they are used repetitively and mechanically. There is a lack of paragraphing, which is necessary to organize the different stages of the process. The flow of ideas is linear but lacks sophisticated linking devices. To improve, you should divide your response into at least two or three paragraphs and vary your cohesive devices to create a more natural progression of information.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use the same words, such as 'move', 'add', and 'step'. There are also issues with word choice and collocation, such as 'storage soils' (likely meant 'silos') and 'employee first add a water'. The language is functional but lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band. To improve, try to use more specific process-related vocabulary, such as 'conveyed', 'incorporated', 'extruded', or 'automated', and ensure that your terminology matches the context of industrial manufacturing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly regarding subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'flour move', 'employee... add'), article usage (e.g., 'a water', 'a oil'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or lack proper punctuation, making the text feel like a continuous stream of thoughts. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, as most sentences follow a simple 'subject-verb-object' pattern. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and using a wider variety of sentence structures, including passive voice, which is standard for describing manufacturing processes.

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