Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing instant noodles in eight different stages from storage silos to labelling and sealling.

Overall, the manufacturing instant noodles start from storage silos then transfered for mixer by addition of water and oil to form rollers further than creation of dough sheets ,While the next process is dough strips and proceed for next procedure to make up noodles diisc again they are form to cooking oil and drying and make cups with the addition of vegetable and spices and after that they are labels and after that they formed instant noodles

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0

The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 150 words, which significantly impacts the ability to fully address the task. While the student attempts to outline the stages of the noodle manufacturing process, the description is overly brief and lacks the necessary detail to provide a comprehensive summary. Key features are mentioned, but the lack of development and the failure to reach the required length mean that the response is incomplete. To improve, the student must expand on each stage of the process, providing more descriptive detail and ensuring the response meets the minimum length requirement to allow for a full demonstration of their writing ability.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response lacks clear paragraphing and logical progression. It is presented as a single, run-on paragraph that makes it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of events. While there is an attempt to use transition words like 'Overall' and 'after that', the overuse of 'and' to connect clauses results in a repetitive and mechanical structure. The lack of clear sentence boundaries and effective cohesive devices hinders the flow of information. To improve, the student should organize the response into distinct paragraphs—an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs—and use a wider variety of linking words to connect ideas more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, relying heavily on basic verbs like 'form', 'make', and 'transfer'. There are also issues with word choice and spelling, such as 'sealling' instead of 'sealing', 'diisc' instead of 'discs', and 'labels' used as a verb where 'labeled' would be more appropriate. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process with precision. To improve, the student should focus on learning process-specific terminology (e.g., 'extrusion', 'dehydration', 'packaging') and practice using more precise verbs to describe industrial stages, rather than relying on generic terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that impede clarity. There are issues with sentence structure, such as run-on sentences and missing articles. For example, 'the manufacturing instant noodles start' should be 'the manufacturing of instant noodles starts'. Additionally, there are errors in verb forms, such as 'transfered' (spelling) and 'they are form to cooking oil', which is grammatically incorrect and confusing. The range of structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple, poorly constructed sentences. To improve, the student needs to focus on basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing manufacturing processes.

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