Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagram shows the different stages of process of manufacturing instant noodles in small factory.
Overall, the figure illustrates process 1 to 8 for fully prepare noodles ready for packing. There are step by step process for making noodles. In factory manufacturing instant noodles made by the use of flour, water and oil.
Firstly, flour is collect by the trucks or jeep any ways one kinds of transportation. All the flour is managed in storage silos then mixed with the oil and water. The mixing of flour, water and oil is ready for rollers in dough strips .
Secondly, in the dough strips with the help of roller it is ready for noodles discs then the noodles discs is cooking with oil and drying moreover mixed vegetables species after drying it is collect in cups for labelling and sealing . At the end labels the noodles and ready for used and sell the costumers.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response covers the main stages of the noodle manufacturing process, from the delivery of flour to the final packaging. However, the description is somewhat superficial and lacks a clear, logical flow in reporting the stages. While the main features are identified, the comparison between stages is weak, and the explanation of the process is occasionally confusing, such as the mention of 'mixed vegetables species' which is not clearly linked to the diagram's flow. To reach a higher band, you should ensure that each stage is described with greater clarity and that the relationship between the steps is more explicitly stated.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into two short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. While you use basic cohesive devices like 'Firstly' and 'Secondly', the transition between sentences is often mechanical and sometimes confusing. For example, the shift from 'dough strips' to 'noodles discs' lacks a clear explanation of the transformation. The use of referencing is occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of events. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring that each sentence logically follows the previous one will significantly enhance the coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You rely on simple terms like 'collect', 'ready', and 'made by'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'mixed vegetables species' (likely referring to spices or seasonings) and 'costumers' (which should be 'customers'). To improve, you should aim to use more precise terminology related to industrial processes, such as 'processed', 'distributed', or 'automated'. Expanding your range of vocabulary to include more specific verbs and nouns will help you achieve a higher score in this criterion.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'flour is collect' instead of 'collected'), missing articles (e.g., 'in small factory'), and awkward phrasing (e.g., 'fully prepare noodles ready for packing'). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, which limits your ability to demonstrate grammatical range. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, including correct verb tenses, passive voice usage, and proper article placement. Proofreading for these common errors will help improve the overall accuracy of your writing.
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