Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The illustrated diagram depicts the simple process of noodles making. Respectively, process include several steps.

At first there are storage soils from where flour is taken and delivers to mixing area where water and oil mixed together, after that mixed material shifted to rollers where dough sheets are made and transfer to dough striping place, in which the sheets become in strips form and move to noodles discs where these strips are converted into round shape, after shaping is done items are transfer to cooking area where these round shape material are cooked in oil and then these round shape noodles were drying and shifted to cups where different spices and vegetables are mixed with noodles in cups and at the last process cups are transfer for labeling, and instant noodles are ready to go.

In comparison, it is a simple process of noodles which shows how instant noodles are made and and which ingredients are used in making and shaping of instant noodles.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the process, but it lacks a clear overview. A Band 6 response should provide a clear summary of the process, whereas this response merely lists steps without highlighting the key stages or the transformation from raw ingredients to the final product. The description is largely a chronological list of actions, which makes it difficult for the reader to grasp the overall manufacturing flow. To improve, you should group the stages logically (e.g., preparation, shaping, cooking, and packaging) and provide a concise summary in the introduction or conclusion that captures the essence of the process.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The response suffers from a lack of paragraphing, as it is presented as one long, dense block of text. This makes the progression of ideas feel mechanical and repetitive. While you use some cohesive devices like 'at first' and 'after that', the overuse of 'and' to connect long, run-on sentences creates a disjointed flow. To achieve a higher band, you must use clear paragraph breaks to separate the different stages of the process and use a wider variety of cohesive devices to link ideas more naturally rather than relying on simple conjunctions.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is somewhat limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic verbs like 'made', 'shifted', and 'transfer' (which should be 'transferred'). There is also some awkward phrasing, such as 'storage soils' (likely meant to be 'silos') and 'dough striping place'. To improve, you should aim to use more precise, process-oriented vocabulary such as 'processed', 'conveyed', 'extruded', or 'packaged'. The current range is adequate for basic communication but lacks the precision required for a higher band score in an academic task.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, particularly regarding verb forms and sentence structure. For example, you wrote 'process include' instead of 'the process includes' and 'these round shape material are cooked' instead of 'this round-shaped material is cooked'. There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and tense consistency. The sentences are often run-on, lacking proper punctuation to separate distinct ideas. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and using full stops to create shorter, clearer sentences rather than relying on long, complex strings of clauses.

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