Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-31
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The process diagram illustrates the formation of instant noodles
Overall,It takes total 8 steps.It is started with the storage of silos and ends with labelling and selling.water and oil are also added and some vegetables and different ingredients.
In the first step, silos are collected in an area and then in the next step mixer is used to mix water and oil and created a mixture.However, in the next step dough sheet are prepared which is placed on a roller.In the next step dough strips are formed using different mechanism.
In the fifth step, noodles are formed in the shape of a disc and then the cooking and drying of disc happened. In the next step, the vegetable and spices are added in a cup. In the last step labelling and selling are created on a cup using labelling machine and then the noodles boxes are transferred to different shops.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response provides a basic overview of the manufacturing process, but it lacks the necessary detail and analytical depth required for a higher band. While you identified the main steps, the description is somewhat superficial. For instance, you mention 'silos are collected' and 'mixer is used', but you fail to describe the specific inputs or the transformation process clearly. The overview is also quite brief and does not effectively highlight the key stages or the flow of the process. To improve, ensure you describe the sequence of events more precisely and include more specific information from the diagram, such as the specific temperatures or the role of the rollers and cutters.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay is organized into a brief introduction and a body paragraph, but the paragraphing is insufficient. The flow between sentences is somewhat mechanical, relying heavily on repetitive transition words like 'In the next step'. While the logical progression is generally followable, the lack of clear paragraph breaks between the overview and the detailed process makes the text feel cluttered. To improve, use a wider variety of cohesive devices such as 'subsequently', 'following this', or 'once the process is complete' to link ideas more naturally and improve the overall structure of the report.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is functional but limited. You rely on basic verbs like 'collected', 'used', and 'formed', which do not demonstrate the range needed for an Academic Task 1 response. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'labelling and selling are created on a cup', which is imprecise. To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more specific technical vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'processed', 'integrated', 'conveyed', or 'automated'. Focusing on precise terminology will help you describe the diagram more accurately and professionally.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains a mix of simple and some attempted complex structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors. For example, 'It is started with the storage' is passive voice misuse, and 'dough sheet are prepared' shows a subject-verb agreement error. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after periods (e.g., 'Overall,It takes'). The use of articles is occasionally inaccurate, such as 'in a cup' instead of 'into cups'. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and subject-verb agreement before attempting more complex structures. Proofreading for punctuation and article usage will also significantly improve your score.
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