Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 5.0)
The diagarm show the whole method who to manufactured the noodles
Manfacturing instant noodles step by step.
Step 1; Storage silos and flour
Step 2 ; storage silos and flour add in mixer machine and add some water and oil and mixed up and rolls on the dough sheet .
Step 3; All mixed matieral on the dough sheet after this process this material change in the shape of noodles discs
After this process the dough strips change in to the foam of noodles discs after this the noodles discs cooked in the cooking oil after this the cooking noodles dry and short a next process .
In the next step cooked noodles add in the cups and add some special vegetables and some speical spices in the noodles cups.
After all the process labeling the cups with brands name and sealing with the packing the send to the market for sell.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to describe the process of manufacturing instant noodles, but it fails to provide a coherent summary or a clear overview. The structure is fragmented, relying on a list-like format rather than a cohesive report. While the student identifies the main stages, the description of the process is often unclear, such as the vague mention of 'short a next process'. The response lacks a proper introduction and conclusion, and the information is presented in a disjointed manner that does not fully meet the requirements of an Academic Task 1 report. To improve, the student should focus on grouping the stages into logical paragraphs and using formal, descriptive language to explain the flow of the process.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The response lacks logical organization. The use of bullet-point-style headings ('Step 1', 'Step 2') is inappropriate for an IELTS essay, which requires continuous prose. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link the stages of the process; instead, the text relies on repetitive phrases like 'after this process' and 'after this'. Paragraphing is absent, making the text difficult to follow. To achieve a higher score, the student must use transition words (e.g., 'subsequently', 'following this', 'once the mixture is prepared') to create a smooth flow between sentences and organize the information into clear, thematic paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is limited and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors such as 'diagarm', 'Manfacturing', 'matieral', and 'speical'. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process effectively. Phrases like 'mixed up' and 'change in the shape' are overly simplistic and informal. The student needs to incorporate more precise, process-oriented vocabulary, such as 'ingredients', 'incorporate', 'extrusion', 'dehydration', and 'packaging'. Expanding the range of verbs and nouns related to manufacturing would significantly improve the clarity and professional tone of the writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors in sentence structure, punctuation, and verb tense. Many sentences are fragmented or lack proper subject-verb agreement, such as 'The diagarm show' and 'the send to the market'. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the misuse of semicolons. The writing is characterized by simple, often ungrammatical clauses. To improve, the student should practice constructing complete, error-free sentences and work on using a variety of structures, including passive voice, which is essential for describing industrial processes.
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