Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram shows how noodles are manufactured by a factory. Childrens eat noodles alot as well as now youngers also eat we sumarize the information and the processing.
First of all silos are stores in large drums and add flour in drums for mixing. In the mixer put some water and oil and the mixer rolls noodles with the help roollers.
After the roollers noodles are passing in the dough sheets and the dough strips make them in the form of stick consequently, Strips are adding in the noodles discs where they are cooked by adding oil with the need of noodles. On the next vegetables like ginger, garnish, and clove powder to make them spices adds red chillis hence the process is complete so noodles are ready for saling.
On the last stage labels the noodles with name of knoor noodles and ingredients then seal them.
to sum up in this way noodles are manufactured in a company.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response attempts to describe the manufacturing process but fails to provide a clear overview or highlight the main features of the diagram. The inclusion of irrelevant personal commentary about children eating noodles is inappropriate for an Academic Task 1 response. Furthermore, the description of the process is fragmented and lacks the necessary detail to explain the stages accurately. The response does not effectively summarize the information, and the sequence of events is difficult to follow due to a lack of focus on the key stages of production. To improve, focus strictly on the visual information provided and ensure a clear, logical summary of the process stages.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. While some cohesive devices are used, such as 'First of all' and 'to sum up', they are often used incorrectly or in a way that does not improve the flow of the text. The referencing is frequently unclear, and the transition between the stages of the manufacturing process is abrupt. The lack of logical connection between sentences makes the overall structure feel mechanical and difficult to follow. Improving the use of linking words and ensuring each paragraph has a clear, singular focus would significantly enhance the coherence of the writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive, relying on basic terms like 'put', 'add', and 'make'. There are several instances of incorrect word choice, such as 'saling' instead of 'selling' and 'roollers' (spelling error). The use of 'youngers' is not standard English in this context. The range of vocabulary is insufficient to describe a technical process with precision. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more specific terminology related to manufacturing processes, such as 'conveyed', 'processed', 'extruded', or 'packaged', and ensure correct spelling throughout the response.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede communication. There are issues with subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'silos are stores', 'spices adds'), incorrect pluralization ('Childrens'), and awkward sentence structures. The use of punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization and comma usage. The range of grammatical structures is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences with errors in basic syntax. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring subject-verb agreement, and practicing the correct use of articles and prepositions in a descriptive context.
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