Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

The diagram highlights the manufacturing process of instant noodles in factory by different making steps from storage room to making with labels.

Overall, the whole noodles making process pass through different activities, It start from the storage room, where a factory owner stored flour in bags and then employer of the factory pull it till the mixer point, where flour mixed with water and oil for better results. After obtaining mixture, it putted on rollers and pulled it towards dough sheets for further processing. Then it go through from dough strips and reached in the noodles discs after making noodles slides, and then fall into the hot oil for cooking and then again through back out side the oil for drying process. After drying, next process in to add vegetables and spices into it for making better taste. Then the next turn is to labelling of the brands and sealing in the packets for markets. Then noodles are ready for distribution form bazars.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The response covers the main stages of the manufacturing process, from the storage of flour to the final distribution. However, the description is somewhat mechanical and lacks a clear overview of the process as a whole. While the key steps are identified, the response fails to highlight the cyclical or transformative nature of the process effectively. The inclusion of unnecessary details, such as mentioning a 'factory owner' or 'employer', detracts from the academic tone required for Task 1. To improve, focus on describing the flow of the process using more objective, impersonal language and ensure the overview clearly summarises the main stages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The essay is organised into two paragraphs, but the internal structure is weak. The use of cohesive devices is repetitive and often mechanical, such as the frequent use of 'then' to link sentences. The progression of ideas is sometimes unclear, particularly when describing the transition between the dough sheets and the noodles discs. Paragraphing is present, but the introductory paragraph is quite brief and the body paragraph is a long, dense block of text that would benefit from being broken down into logical stages of the process.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but lacks the precision and variety expected at higher bands. There is a reliance on basic verbs like 'making', 'put', and 'go'. Some word choices are awkward or inaccurate, such as 'noodles slides' and 'distribution form bazars'. There is little evidence of less common lexical items or precise technical terminology related to manufacturing. To achieve a higher score, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to industrial processes, such as 'conveyed', 'processed', 'extruded', or 'packaged'.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'it putted on rollers' (incorrect verb form), 'it go through from dough strips' (subject-verb agreement and preposition error), and 'then the next turn is to labelling' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with several run-on sentences. To improve, focus on mastering basic verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of passive voice, which is essential for describing industrial processes.

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