Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

This figure shows the manufacturing instant noodles.

There are 8 steps in this noodles process. Beginning of manufacturing of noodles starts with storing silos and ending with labels the product.

At first stage process, Flour is put in the storage silos and then mixed the water, oil and flour then mixer the product. In third stage process, with the help of roller, dough put in the dough sheets and then followed to the dough strips process.

At the five stages process, dough will be make different shapes with the help of noodles discs . After that, sixth stages process put it oil and cooked the dough discs and then drying the product. In seventh stages process, vegatables species put into the cup with properly. At last process, labelling the each product and product will be packaged with properly and verify that product with valid date or expired date with effectiveness ways.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response covers the main stages of the process, but the overview is weak and lacks a clear summary of the overall manufacturing cycle. While the steps are identified, the description is often repetitive and lacks the necessary precision required for an Academic Task 1 report. For instance, the transition between stages is described in a fragmented way, such as 'At the five stages process' and 'In seventh stages process,' which fails to clearly articulate the flow of the production line. To improve, you should focus on grouping the stages logically and providing a more cohesive overview of the entire process from raw materials to the final packaged product.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The essay is divided into paragraphs, which is a positive step, but the internal cohesion is problematic. The use of cohesive devices is often mechanical or inaccurate, such as 'At first stage process' and 'In third stage process,' which sound unnatural. There is a lack of variety in linking words, and the progression of ideas feels disjointed rather than flowing logically from one step to the next. The referencing is also occasionally unclear, making it difficult for the reader to follow the sequence of the manufacturing process without re-reading.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use basic terms like 'process' and 'product' without demonstrating a wider range of vocabulary related to manufacturing or industrial processes. There are also several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'labels the product' instead of 'labeling the product' and 'vegetables species' instead of 'vegetable ingredients' or 'dried vegetables.' To reach a higher band, you need to incorporate more precise terminology related to the diagram, such as 'extrusion,' 'steaming,' or 'dehydration,' and improve your control over word forms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The grammatical control is weak, with frequent errors that occasionally impede clarity. There are consistent issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage, such as 'Beginning of manufacturing of noodles starts' and 'dough will be make.' Sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'verify that product with valid date or expired date with effectiveness ways.' These errors are frequent and distract the reader, indicating a need for more practice with basic sentence construction and verb tenses.

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