Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-14
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The figure shows the making of noodles in factory and how they prepared by selecting and report
firstly, i am store silos and next the siols into a roller with water and oil and mix it after that the mixer turn into a sheets thereafter this stage,the mixture is transformed into dough strips
In the subsequent stages for process, the dough strips formed into circular noodles dices these dices undergo process of cooking in oil and drying to solidify amd preserve them.once dried noodles are placed into individual cups, where vegitables and spices are added enhance flavour. In final step,the cups undergo a process labeling and sealing this is end of tha process.
Eventually,I must say this is a wonderful process to making noodles. This is a hardworking work. I am suggesting all of people one time making a noodles and I am sure all are enjoyed this process and knowledge for making a noodles
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response attempts to summarize the diagram showing the manufacturing process of instant noodles, identifying several key steps such as mixing flour with water and oil, forming sheets and dough strips, cutting into circular noodle dices, cooking, drying, adding vegetables and spices, and finally sealing. However, the student includes personal commentary and conversational remarks at the beginning and end, which are completely inappropriate for an academic task report. Furthermore, some parts of the process description are underdeveloped or unclear, and there is a lack of an overview statement summarizing the main stages or overall nature of the manufacturing process, which is essential for Band 6.0 and above. Therefore, the response falls into the Band 5 category for task achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5
The text is organized into three paragraphs, including an introduction and a concluding section, but the overall progression of ideas is disrupted by inappropriate register and conversational filler like 'i am store silos' and 'Eventually,I must say this is a wonderful process'. Cohesive devices are used mechanically or are missing, as seen with disjointed phrasing and abrupt transitions like 'firstly, i am store silos and next the siols into a roller'. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within sentences is frequently faulty. Referencing is unclear in places, and punctuation and capitalization errors throughout the text hinder the smooth flow of information, placing this response firmly at Band 4.5 or 5.0.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The student demonstrates a very limited range of vocabulary, relying heavily on basic and repetitive terms such as 'process', 'making', 'noodles', and 'dices'. There are numerous word choice and spelling errors, such as 'siols' instead of silos, 'amd' for and, 'vegitables' for vegetables, and 'enhancing' misspelt as 'enhance flavour'. Furthermore, the student uses inappropriate, informal conversational vocabulary ('hardworking work', 'wonderful process') rather than objective language suitable for an Academic Task 1 report. The lexical range is minimally adequate to convey basic concepts of the diagram, but frequent errors and inappropriate register restrict the score to Band 4.5.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0
The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of poorly constructed simple sentences and faulty attempts at complex structures. There are persistent, severe errors in basic sentence construction, such as missing verbs ('the siols into a roller', 'where vegitables and spices are added enhance flavour'), incorrect personal pronouns ('i am store silos'), and severe punctuation and capitalization issues (e.g., lowercase 'i', missing spaces after commas, run-on sentences). The high frequency of grammatical errors frequently impedes communication and causes difficulty for the reader, which aligns with the descriptors for Band 4.0.
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