Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-16

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

This diagram demonstrate the procedure of manufacture noodles. that how to make instant noodle in company .

First of all the flour trucks bring flour to the storage trunks in the company

after that the flourgoes to to mixer and add water and oil with that. The mixer mix them all and then the roller press them.

In the next stage the roller make this mixture into dough sheets. And the dough strips cut the sheets in to narrow portions.

After the dough strips they reshaped to noodle dise and and send for cooking in oil after that they dry it and pour into cups for next procedure.

After the stage of of cooking and drying they pour into cups and they add vegetable and spices in the instant noodles then the noodles is ready for lebeling .

After the adding of this they sent this for labeling and then its ready for sell.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response attempts to describe the linear manufacturing process of instant noodles, tracing steps from flour delivery to final packaging. However, the summary lacks a clear overall overview of the entire process, and several stages are described repetitively or out of logical sequence, such as mentioning the cups and spices multiple times ("they pour into cups and they add vegetable and spices"). While the main stages (storage, mixing, rolling, cutting, shaping, cooking, drying, seasoning, and sealing) are touched upon, the lack of clear synthesis and the repetitive reporting prevent the response from achieving a higher band. It satisfies the basic requirements of addressing the visual data, but remains somewhat under-developed in its reporting of the main features.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.5

The text suffers from poor structural cohesion and inadequate paragraphing. The response is written as a single dense block with very poor formatting, or broken up by arbitrary line breaks that do not represent proper paragraphs. Cohesive devices are extremely basic and repetitive, relying heavily on simple sequence words like "after that" and "then". Referencing is also faulty in places, with pronouns like "they" used ambiguously without clear antecedents (e.g., "after that they dry it and pour into cups"). There is no clear progression of ideas across a well-structured essay format, leading to a disjointed reading experience.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic, repetitive, and heavily relies on words directly lifted from the prompt diagram (such as "flour", "mixer", "water", "oil", "dough sheets", "cups"). There are numerous lexical errors and awkward word choices, such as "procedure of manufacture noodles", "storage trunks" instead of silos, and "noodle dise" instead of discs. Attempts to use less common vocabulary are either inaccurate or marred by spelling errors, such as "lebeling". The lexical range is minimally adequate for the task, but vocabulary limitations and inaccuracies frequently strain the reader.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5

The grammatical range is extremely limited, consisting mostly of simple sentences and basic active structures with frequent structural flaws. There are multiple fundamental grammatical errors throughout the text, including subject-verb agreement issues ("the flourgoes", "noodles is ready"), missing articles ("manufacture noodles"), punctuation errors, and severe fragment sentences or run-on structures ("This diagram demonstrate the procedure of manufacture noodles. that how to make instant noodle in company ."). Complex sentence forms are virtually absent or attempted with faulty mechanics. These frequent errors cause significant difficulty and distraction for the reader.

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