Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

The provided diagram illustrates the multi-stage linear process involved in the commercial production of instant noodles.

Its an eight step involves in manufacturing of instant noodles. In this steps the flour are going through the various process like mixing flour into water, doughing, cutting, shapping and many more.

The main is base which is called stroage silos in which our noodles flour was stored from storage silos flour was transferred into mixer where the dought was made. Dough move into the rollers, transfer into sheets, sheets cut into the strips.

When strips was made its converted into discs afterthat, most important steps was begain which is oiling. putting oil into the noodles is the most perservative method.

ongoing noodles was transferred into cups with their spices and vegetables. Now last but not a least is labelling brands name around the cups now last and finial step is seals the cups and now cups was ready to beat in battle.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe the diagram showing how instant noodles are manufactured, but it falls short in several areas. While the introduction acknowledges the multi-stage process, the body paragraphs struggle to clearly sequence and explain the steps. For instance, the writer mentions 'storage silos in which our noodles flour was stored' and 'mixer where the dought was made', but the description of the transformation from dough sheets and strips into discs and subsequently through cooking and drying lacks clarity and precision. Furthermore, the inclusion of personal commentary like 'ready to beat in battle' is inappropriate for an Academic task. Overall, the response addresses the task only partially, earning a band score of 4.5.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 4.0

The organizational structure of the essay is very weak. The text is divided into a short introduction followed by a block of dense, poorly connected sentences that lack logical progression. Paragraphing is not used effectively to separate distinct phases of the manufacturing process (such as preparation, shaping, cooking, and packaging). Cohesive devices are either missing or misused, resulting in disjointed transitions between sentences, such as 'When strips was made its converted into discs afterthat'. Referencing is also unclear at times, making it difficult for the reader to follow the flow of the process. Consequently, this criterion warrants a band score of 4.0.

Lexical Resource — Band 4.0

The vocabulary used is very basic and heavily repetitious. The writer makes frequent word choice and spelling errors, such as 'stroage' instead of storage, 'dought' instead of dough, 'shapping' instead of shaping, and 'finial' instead of final. There is a lack of precision and appropriate terminology for describing a manufacturing process. Although the writer attempts some less common words like 'perservative', these terms are misused or misspelled, leading to strain for the reader. The range of vocabulary is limited and inadequate for a higher band, resulting in a score of 4.0.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.0

Grammatical control is weak throughout the response. There are frequent errors in verb tenses, subject-verb agreement, and sentence structure. Examples include 'Its an eight step involves', 'the flour are going', and 'the most important steps was begain'. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex structures are flawed. Punctuation is also problematic, with run-on sentences and missing capitalization or periods, such as 'Now last but not a least is labelling brands name around the cups now last and finial step is seals the cups'. These frequent errors impede communication and place the grammar at a band 4.0.

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