Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-26
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The diagram illustrate the whole making process of noodle how to manufacturing of the nodle in industry was done in eight stpes.
Overall, the digram demonstrates the manufacturing of noodles form begning to end which including in eight steps while start form stograge of silos to labelling and sealing of the product.
On the one hand, the process start form begining step the storage soilos transfer to the mixter after that adding water with oil and shift to rollers. Morever the third step which make a fiber from the mixter and than start the the dough strips progress. however, in the 5 step nodiles discs and add cooking oil with drying the the noodles.
on the other hand, the nodle putting in cup add special flaver of vegetables and spices than submeet to the next process labelling and sealing of the cups of noodles. however the product complete and than transfer to the shops for selling.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0
The student attempts to describe the eight-step manufacturing process of instant noodles, providing a basic overview in the introduction and second paragraph. However, the response suffers from significant strain in conveying the sequential data clearly. While the main stages—such as flour storage, mixing, rolling into sheets and strips, forming discs, cooking, adding vegetables, and final packaging—are touched upon, the explanation of individual steps is frequently muddled, overly brief, or confused. For instance, phrases like 'the third step which make a fiber from the mixter and than start the the dough strips progress' fail to accurately report the visual data. The summary misses several key relationships and spatial movements shown in the diagram. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a band score of 5.0.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is organized into paragraphs, attempting an introduction, an overview, and body paragraphs. However, the logical progression is severely disrupted by frequent errors in cohesion, mechanical transitions, and confusing sentence structures. Devices such as 'On the one hand' and 'on the other hand' are used inappropriately to divide a linear manufacturing process. Paragraphing is attempted, but the internal cohesion within sentences and clauses frequently breaks down, making the overall progression difficult to follow. Referencing is also weak, with unclear pronouns and abrupt shifts between stages. This level of organization and cohesive control aligns best with band 5.0.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is very limited and heavily repetitive, relying on basic terms such as 'process', 'manufacturing', 'noodles', 'steps', and 'cups'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors throughout the text, including 'illustrate' instead of 'illustrates', 'stpes' for 'steps', 'digram' for 'diagram', 'form' for 'from', 'begning' for 'beginning', 'stograge' for 'storage', 'mixter' for 'mixer', 'soilos' for 'silos', 'nodiles' for 'noodles', 'flaver' for 'flavor', and 'submeet' for 'submitted'. These persistent lexical inaccuracies and spelling mistakes significantly impede communication and restrict the range of vocabulary, placing the performance firmly at band 4.0.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response displays a very limited range of grammatical structures, with frequent and severe errors that constantly strain the reader's understanding. Simple sentences are poorly constructed, and attempts at complex or compound structures are consistently faulty (e.g., 'The diagram illustrate the whole making process of noodle how to manufacturing of the nodle in industry was done in eight stpes.'). There are major issues with subject-verb agreement, tense consistency, missing prepositions, and fragmented clauses. Few error-free sentences exist in the entire text. This grammatical profile reflects band 4.0 descriptors.
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