Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrates the several steps (silos, dough sheets, dough strips, discs and sealing) for manufacturing noodles quickly from first steps to the last steps.

Overall, manfuactured instant noodles goes through multiple steps. Firstly, mixed water and oil in silos storage and passed through rollers which is dough sheets and then went from dough strips it's a process when making strips for noodles after that we got the noodles in the shape of discs which similar to circle shape.

Secondly, the noodles discs could cooked and dry for a while and included vegetables spices, souces and put in the cups. Cups acrossed and comes for labelling the final step is labelled and put seal on the cups and being ready for customers. In this way prepared instant noodles by the help of machine.

Although, from first step to final steps we go through one by one and demonstrate how noodles be manufacuted instantly and being proper ready for the users.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

The candidate attempts to describe the process of manufacturing instant noodles, mentioning several key stages such as storage silos, dough sheets, strips, discs, cooking, and sealing. However, the response lacks a clear and coherent overall overview of the entire linear process. Furthermore, the description contains numerous inaccuracies and confusion regarding the sequence and mechanical actions shown in the diagram (e.g., claiming that water and oil are mixed in silos storage, or that discs are similar to a circle shape in a somewhat confusing manner). Key details from the visual data are missed or incorrectly connected, leading to an under-developed summary that only partially addresses the prompt requirements.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The text is divided into paragraphs, attempting a chronological breakdown using transitional markers like "Firstly", "Secondly", and "Although". However, the logical progression is frequently disrupted by confusing referencing and poor sentence construction. For instance, phrases like "mixed water and oil in silos storage and passed through rollers which is dough sheets" create immense confusion regarding what is happening to whom. Paragraphing is attempted, but internal cohesion is weak and often mechanical or inaccurate, making it difficult for the reader to follow the smooth flow of the manufacturing process.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The vocabulary used is very basic and often imprecise or incorrectly applied. The candidate uses some task-specific nouns lifted from the prompt, such as "silos", "dough sheets", "dough strips", and "discs", but struggles with word choice and collocation elsewhere (e.g., "manfuactured instant noodles goes", "discs could cooked and dry", "souces"). There are frequent spelling errors (e.g., "manfuactured", "acrossed") and awkward word formations that reflect a limited range and strain the reader's comprehension.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

The writing relies heavily on simple and heavily faulted complex sentence structures. There is a persistent lack of control over basic grammatical boundaries, resulting in run-on sentences and fragmented clauses (e.g., "Secondly, the noodles discs could cooked and dry for a while and included vegetables spices, souces and put in the cups"). Passive and active voices are incorrectly interchanged, and verb tense/form consistency is poor ("could cooked and dry", "is labelled and put seal"). Frequent errors in grammar and punctuation cause significant difficulty for the reader.

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