Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The diagram outline the stage of noodles production.Overall the diagram illustrates a multi-satge process involving a sequence of interconnceted step. beginning with storage silosand clumination in lableiing and sealing. The procedure follows a clear and sysmaatic progession, with each stage contributing directly to the subsequent phase.
Initially, Storage silos came from warehouse, folllowing this subsence is mixes with water and oil, In the next stage machine into dough sheets is procedure. Once this has been completed rest of work autmatically machine handle dough strips, subsequently, noodles discs is observing step over few minutes. Thereafter, noodles ready for main ingredient to add cooking and drying ready for packing. At this point cup is machine into adding some vegetables and spices which noodle test good got ot final step. In the final stage Labelling and sealing to completed, resulting ready to go to consumer eat. Ultimately this process following early age become popular.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to describe the process of manufacturing instant noodles, providing a general overview and mentioning several steps such as storage silos, mixing with water and oil, dough sheets, cooking, and packaging. However, the response suffers from severe inaccuracies, misinterpretations, and omissions of key stages shown in the diagram (such as rollers, cutting into strips and discs, adding vegetables and spices, and labelling and sealing). Furthermore, many sentences are extremely vague or incoherent (e.g., 'noodles discs is observing step over few minutes'), making it difficult to fully grasp the reported sequence. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, leading to a low band score.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The response is divided into two poorly structured paragraphs, with the first acting as an introduction and the second attempting to describe the entire sequence. Cohesion is highly problematic throughout. Transitional phrases like 'Initially', 'folllowing this subsence', 'In the next stage', and 'Thereafter' are misused or accompanied by severe spelling and grammatical errors, creating a mechanical and confusing flow. The logical progression breaks down frequently due to fragmented sentence structures and unclear pronoun or noun referencing (e.g., 'Storage silos came from warehouse', 'Once this has been completed rest of work autmatically machine handle dough strips'). Paragraphing is inadequate, and overall organization lacks clarity.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is extremely basic, repetitive, and often misused. The student attempts some topic-related vocabulary such as 'storage silos', 'dough sheets', 'cooking', and 'packaging', but these are undermined by widespread spelling mistakes ('interconnceted', 'satge', 'clumination', 'lableiing', 'sysmaatic', 'progession', 'subsence', 'autmatically') and incorrect word forms (e.g., 'machine into dough sheets is procedure', 'noodle test good got ot final step'). The range of vocabulary is limited and strained, frequently impeding communication and forcing the reader to guess the intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
Grammatical control is weak throughout the text. The student attempts a mix of simple and complex sentences, but almost every sentence contains severe structural, agreement, or tense errors (e.g., 'The diagram outline', 'Storage silos came from warehouse', 'machine into dough sheets is procedure', 'noodles discs is observing step over few minutes'). Punctuation is also erratic, with missing full stops or commas leading to run-on thoughts and fragmented clauses. The majority of sentences contain errors, frequently causing difficulty and confusion for the reader.
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