Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
The given diagram despits show the manufactured process of noodles
overall,there are a sevral stages of this process and all these stages are very important so that this process can be done.
When the first stage starts silos are picked by a truck from storage tank. Ater that in factory silos mix with water and oil by the help of mixer and put on rollers for making dough strips.whereas, by completing this step strips are sent to next machine which make noodles discs. however now noodles are ready for cooking and drying also.After drying add some vegetables and important spices for making more delecious and pack in a cups with labeling. while comleting all the steps cups sent to market for selling.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The student attempts to describe the process of manufacturing instant noodles, but the response suffers from significant limitations. First, the minimum word count of 150 words is not met, as the text contains only 122 words, resulting in a mandatory penalty under Task Achievement. While the writer identifies several stages—such as flour storage, mixing with water and oil, forming dough strips and discs, cooking, drying, and adding vegetables and spices—the explanation is superficial and misses key mechanical links shown in the diagram, such as the rollers and the sealing process. The overview is weak and vague, merely stating that there are several important stages. Consequently, the task is only partially addressed, earning a band score of 4.5.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0
The text is divided into three very short paragraphs, including a single-sentence overview. Progression through the stages is attempted using transition markers like 'When the first stage starts', 'Ater that', and 'whereas', but these cohesive devices are often inaccurate, mechanical, or awkward in context. Paragraphing is poorly handled, with the main body compressed into a single dense and chaotic paragraph that lacks clear division between the preparatory steps and the packaging phase. Referencing is occasionally confusing, such as 'silos are picked by a truck from storage tank', which misinterprets the visual flow of flour being delivered to silos. Overall organisation shows some basic structure but lacks clear progression and coherent flow.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.5
Vocabulary usage is basic, repetitive, and heavily reliant on the words provided directly in the prompt, such as 'silos', 'mix', 'water', 'oil', 'rollers', and 'noodles discs'. There are several spelling and word-choice errors, including 'despits show' instead of 'depicts', 'sevral' instead of 'several', 'Ater' instead of 'After', 'delecious' instead of 'delicious', and 'comleting' instead of 'completing'. The range of vocabulary is limited and minimally adequate for conveying simple ideas, but noticeable errors and awkward collocations—like 'silos are picked by a truck'—cause difficulty and strain the reader.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The response demonstrates a very limited range of grammatical structures. Most sentences are simplistic or feature faulty attempts at complex clauses. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including missing articles ('pack in a cups', 'sent to market'), punctuation errors (lack of capitalization after periods, missing spaces after commas in 'overall,there'), and incorrect verb forms ('is manufactured' attempted as 'the manufactured process'). Run-on sentences and awkward phrasing—such as 'so that this process can be done'—interfere with readability. Control over basic grammar and punctuation is weak, placing the response firmly at band 4.0.
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