Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
Student answer (Band 4.0)
The given diagram illustrates production of instant noodles.
Firstly, the flour and storage soil are the raw material of instant noodles. these raw material mixed in a mixer with addition of water and oil takes place in it.Furthermore, next procedure roller making dough sheet to secure the noodle packet and than move on dough strips who make packet unheatable morover, noodle discs are prepared wand than coocked the noodles and after that dry the oil after all added some floavours which contain vegitable and spieces and make cups of noodles.
Continue furthermore final product under goes labeling and seeling take place also and label on the cup of brand and availaible for everyone
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 4.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.0 |
| Overall | 4.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5
The response attempts to describe the manufacturing process of instant noodles, identifying key stages such as flour storage, mixing, rolling into sheets and strips, forming discs, cooking, drying, and adding flavors and packaging. However, the response falls significantly short of the 150-word minimum, containing only 113 words. This under-length impacts the full development of the task. While several steps from the diagram are mentioned, the lack of an overview and the brevity with which the process is described prevent the response from achieving a higher band score under Task Achievement.
Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0
The text lacks proper paragraphing, presented instead as a single block of text with run-on sentences. Cohesive devices are used awkwardly or repetitively, such as 'Firstly', 'Furthermore, next procedure', 'than move on', 'morover', and 'Continue furthermore'. The logical progression of the process is obscured by dense, poorly punctuated clauses and frequent shifts in focus. Although some sequence words are attempted, overall organization and referencing do not demonstrate clear paragraphing or smooth flow, resulting in a weak coherence profile.
Lexical Resource: Band 4.0
The vocabulary used is basic and heavily reliant on direct lifting or awkward paraphrasing from the prompt, such as 'storage soil' instead of silos, 'coocked', 'vegitable', 'spieces', 'floavours', 'seeling', and 'availaible'. There are numerous spelling and word-choice errors that occasionally impede understanding, such as 'unheatable' or 'label on the cup of brand'. The lexical range is limited and inadequate for a detailed process description, reflecting frequent slips in form and collocation.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0
The text contains a very limited range of grammatical structures. Simple sentences dominate, and attempts at complex or compound structures are heavily flawed by severe grammatical and punctuation errors, for example: 'these raw material mixed in a mixer with addition of water and oil takes place in it' and 'roller making dough sheet to secure the noodle packet and than move on dough strips who make packet unheatable'. Verb forms, subject-verb agreement, and word order are frequently inaccurate, causing strain for the reader throughout.
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