Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

Now, this picture shows us how noddles became in proper structure. this picture give us all points starting 1 to 8 ,furthermore we describe all the cycle of manufactuting of instant noodles.

firstly, this picture shows us the flour tank fill with storage silos and after that they got mixed with water plus oil in the rollers then the dough sheets goes into dough strips and after that noodles disk became in shape futhermore they add cooking oil and leave them for few minutes after this they put into the cup with vegetable spices and in the end they going to be last and final step which is l;abelling and sealing after this the noodles became in the proper shape

In my opinion, this proces could be more eaiser if we skip some steps and give more other advannce steps

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the process as instant-noodle manufacture and mention several stages, including mixing, shaping, cooking, adding vegetables and spices, and sealing. However, the account is incomplete and some details are inaccurate: water and oil are added in the mixer, not “in the rollers,” and the noodles are cooked in oil and dried rather than simply left for a few minutes. The overview is also unclear, and the final opinion about skipping steps is not relevant to summarising the diagram. The response is 140 words, below the required 150. To improve, give a concise overview of the full sequence and accurately describe the stages from flour storage through to the finished cups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening is followed by a sequence beginning with “firstly” and moving towards the final stage. Connectors such as “after that,” “furthermore,” and “in the end” help signal order. However, most information is crowded into one long paragraph, so the stages are difficult to follow, and the repeated transitions make the progression mechanical. The opening does not clearly preview the process, while the final opinion interrupts the description rather than concluding it. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and the main stages, and group related steps into shorter sentences. Clear references to each stage would make the sequence easier to track.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses some task-related vocabulary, including “storage silos,” “dough sheets,” “dough strips,” “vegetable spices,” and “labelling and sealing,” so the reader can recognise the general subject. However, the range is limited and several choices or spellings reduce clarity, such as “noddles,” “noddles disk,” “proper structure,” and “more eaiser.” Some phrases are also imprecise: “flour tank fill with storage silos” does not clearly describe flour being transported into silos, and “they got mixed” is vague for a process description. Aim for precise process vocabulary and consistent terms, such as “noodle discs,” “are transferred,” and “are packaged.” Proofreading spelling and word forms would also improve readability.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to link stages in longer sentences, but the response relies heavily on simple clauses joined by “and” and “after that,” with limited control of more varied structures. Frequent errors in tense, agreement, articles, and sentence boundaries make parts difficult to understand. For example, “this picture give us” has incorrect subject–verb agreement, while “the dough sheets goes into dough strips” has a plural subject with a singular verb. “They put into the cup” is missing a clear subject and article, and the long second paragraph needs clearer punctuation. Practise describing processes with consistent present simple passive forms, such as “The flour is mixed with water and oil,” and check agreement and sentence boundaries.

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