Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

It is show that how can we made a manyfacturing of noodle. It made on industrial level. First person worked inthe made a plan for it. They made a shape of it.Then they started to madeit . We can first take the storage silos .When we mixed the water and oil .We made the mixture of oil and water.These mixture will put in the boxes.Then the roller made it dough sheet.The all sheet into made a strips.These trips run to noodle.When we make the noodle stirps then we passed to noodle discs.These noodle discs putting on the fire ands then cooking inthe oil.when these noodles cook ,then we took from and put oin the places.These noodles take time to dry then used formany purposes.IT can be used for cups.People used to tea.We can put a many shape onit.We can made shape to look beautiful.Then we can labelling noodle.These noodle went into market.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify a few relevant stages, including mixing ingredients, forming sheets and strips, making noodle discs, cooking, drying and labelling. However, the process is only minimally described and several details are inaccurate or invented. The diagram shows flour entering storage silos and then a mixer, with water and oil added; your account instead says the mixture is put “in the boxes.” You also introduce planning, shaping noodles for beauty, tea use and “many purposes,” none of which is shown. There is no clear overview of the complete production sequence, and the addition of vegetables and spices and the final sealing stage are omitted. Focus on the diagram’s actual stages and summarise the process from flour storage to finished cups.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows a rough chronological order, moving from storage and mixing towards cooking and labelling, and words such as “First,” “then” and “when” show an attempt to connect stages. However, progression is difficult to follow because the account shifts into unrelated ideas about planning, shapes and tea, and some transitions do not clarify how one stage leads to the next. The text is presented as one long paragraph, with inconsistent spacing and punctuation that further disrupt the flow. Group the stages into a clear beginning, middle and end, and use precise links such as “After the dough is rolled into sheets” and “Finally, the cups are labelled and sealed.”

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “storage silos,” “roller,” “dough sheet,” “strips,” “noodle discs,” “cooking” and “labelling.” This gives the reader a basic sense of the process. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description unclear, such as “manyfacturing,” “trips” for strips, “stirps,” and “put oin the places.” Phrases such as “putting on the fire” and “used for many purposes” are imprecise for this diagram. Build a small bank of accurate process terms and use natural collocations, for example, “the dough is rolled into strips” and “the noodles are cooked in oil and dried.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.0

There are attempts to connect events with clauses, as in “when these noodles cook,” but most sentences rely on simple patterns and frequent grammatical errors sometimes distort the intended meaning. Examples include “It is show that how can we made,” “These mixture will put,” and “then we took from and put,” which show problems with verb forms, agreement and sentence construction. Tense and voice also shift inconsistently between “we made,” “will put” and “can be used,” although a process description is best expressed consistently in the present simple passive. Practise accurate patterns such as “The flour is stored in silos” and “Water and oil are added to the mixer,” then check articles, plurals and sentence boundaries.

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