Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-21

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

In the ginen picture we have told about the hole processof a an oil separation in which it takes from land by grill. when it store in a container then it bought to a oil refining factory . Then the further process start as machine separate all the minerals .It passes through the rollers which separate and then it further pass through sheets . Thenmakes nodles and then it separate our cooking oil by colling. After colling and drying the cokking oil then it move futther and procede next procedure to complete its procedure. In our oil then mix others pices to make it mote flavourable. After making it spicies then it fill into different packets or cups . The lables are put down on it and then it prepare for sale . After all this process it sale all over the country or world.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response recognises that the diagram shows a sequence ending with noodles being packed, and it mentions mixing, rollers, cooking/drying, added flavouring, cups and labels. However, it substantially misidentifies the process as oil separation and refining, including “takes from land by grill” and “oil refining factory”; these stages are not shown. Several key steps are also unclear or inaccurate: flour is stored in silos, mixed with water and oil, formed into sheets and strips, and shaped into noodle discs before cooking. The overview does not accurately summarise this process, and the final claim that the product is sold worldwide is unsupported. The response is also five words below the required minimum. A factual, complete account of the diagram’s stages is needed.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic chronological thread, signalled by phrases such as “Then,” “After,” and “After all this process,” so the reader can partly follow the intended movement from preparation to packaging. However, the response is presented as one long paragraph, and the progression becomes difficult to track when stages are repeated or left vague, as in “procede next procedure to complete its procedure.” Connections between the actual stages are not made clear, and some references, such as “it,” have uncertain meanings. Organise the account into an introduction/overview and a clearly ordered process description, using precise links such as “next,” “after shaping,” and “finally” only where they accurately reflect the diagram.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response attempts some process-related vocabulary, including “rollers,” “sheets,” “drying,” “spicies,” “packets,” and “labels,” which gives a basic sense of the topic. However, vocabulary is often inaccurate or repetitive: “oil separation,” “oil refining factory,” and “minerals” do not describe the diagram, while “procedure” is repeated without adding information. Spelling errors such as “nodles,” “colling,” “cokking,” and “lables” also make the account less clear. Use the diagram’s precise terms and standard spellings, and choose verbs that describe each transformation, such as mixing, rolling, cutting, cooking, and sealing. This would make the process easier to understand.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses simple clauses and attempts to connect them into a sequence, for example, “Then the further process start as machine separate all the minerals.” However, sentence control is inconsistent: subject–verb agreement is faulty in “process start” and “machine separate,” and tense and sentence construction are unclear in “when it store in a container then it bought.” Several clauses run together without reliable punctuation, while fragments such as “After colling and drying the cokking oil then it move futther” make the relationships between actions difficult to follow. Practise accurate passive forms suited to a process description, such as “The flour is mixed…” and “The noodles are then dried,” and check verb forms, articles, and sentence boundaries.

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