Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram illustrate the howw instant noodles are manufactured.

Manufacturing instant noodles point 1 is storage silos is connected to flour.Point 2 is mixer is connect to the rollers so the mixer provide the water and oil to rollers and 3 is dough sheets is going to dough strips is convert to noodles discs is converted to cooking (oil) and drying is moving to the point number 7 is vegetables and also provide the spices is connected to the cups.

Cups are very different types so the point 8 is discuss the labelling and sealing the cups. This type connected to the lables.Because all the point discuss the information by selecting and reporting the main features make the all comparisons where relevant. Flour to rollers and rollers convert to heavy machines for more relevant and also provide the vegetables so the cup is ready and then labelling the cups .

Then, the noodles is almost ready and manufacturing.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject and mention several relevant stages, including storage, mixing, dough sheets and strips, cooking and drying, and adding vegetables and spices before labelling. However, the process is only minimally described: important transitions are unclear or missing, and there is no concise overview of the complete sequence from flour storage to finished cups. Some details are inaccurate, such as saying the mixer provides water and oil to the rollers; these ingredients enter the mixer. The statement that cups are “very different types” is unsupported by the diagram. The response also falls one word short of the 150-word minimum. To improve, report the stages accurately and summarise the start and end of the process.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.0

There is a basic attempt to follow the manufacturing sequence, moving from storage and mixing towards cooking, cup filling, and sealing. The numbered references also show an effort to organise the information. However, the ideas are not arranged coherently enough for the reader to follow the process: several stages run together in long sentences, and links such as “is going to” and “is converted to” do not clearly show what happens next. The sentence beginning “Because all the point…” shifts into repeating the task instructions rather than describing the diagram. Use separate sentences or paragraphs for preparation, processing, and packaging, with clear sequence markers such as “next” and “finally.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “storage silos,” “mixer,” “dough sheets,” “noodles discs,” and “labelling and sealing,” so the reader can recognise the general topic. However, the range is limited and several choices are vague or inaccurate, such as “heavy machines” and “discuss the labelling.” Spelling errors, including “howw” and “lables,” also reduce accuracy. Some repeated use of “point” and “connected” makes the description less precise. Build a small set of accurate process verbs and nouns, for example “feed,” “form,” “cook,” “dry,” and “package,” and use them to describe each stage rather than relying on general words.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to connect stages in longer sentences, but sentence structures are very limited and errors are frequent, sometimes making relationships between stages difficult to understand. For example, “The diagram illustrate” has subject–verb disagreement, while “point 2 is mixer is connect to the rollers” contains problems with articles, verb form, and sentence construction. The long sequence beginning “Point 2 is mixer…” also lacks clear clause boundaries, and punctuation is inconsistent, as in “flour.Point.” Practise writing one clear passive sentence for each stage, such as “The flour is mixed with water and oil,” then connect these sentences with simple sequencing language. Check agreement, articles, and verb forms when editing.

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