Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram given shows how ready to cook noodles are maked .

overall the data by choose and outline the key chatergorie and make between where revelent .

The manufacturing instant noodles involves the several storage and beginner the soils and ending the labelling and sealing.

The storage soils start in the diagrame . The storage soils in the loading to flour . The vehicels travel in the factory water and oil mix . The making in the rollers and thired steps making in the dough sheets and four steps making in dough strips and fivth steps in noodles discs and six steps in cooking drying plus oil and seven steps is vegetable plus spices and making cups and eight steps is labelling plus sealing

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the subject as noodle manufacturing and mention several stages, including storage, dough sheets and strips, cooking, adding vegetables and spices, and labelling. However, the process is only minimally described: key transitions and details are unclear or missing, such as flour moving from the silos to the mixer, water and oil being added, and the finished cups emerging on a conveyor. The overview is also inaccurate and difficult to interpret (“several storage and beginner the soils”). The response contains 125 words, below the required 150, so the process is not sufficiently reported. To improve, give a clear overview of the start and end points, then describe the stages in order using accurate details from the diagram.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to follow the process from storage through to labelling, and the numbered references (“thired steps,” “four steps,” and “eight steps”) suggest an intended sequence. However, the response is not divided into clear paragraphs, and the progression is difficult to follow because several stages are compressed into one long sentence. Connections between steps are often missing or unclear, as in “The vehicels travel in the factory water and oil mix.” Use a short introduction and overview, followed by a logically ordered process paragraph. Linking phrases such as “Next,” “After this,” and “Finally” would make the sequence clearer, while complete sentences would prevent ideas from running together.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant process vocabulary, including “storage,” “rollers,” “dough sheets,” “noodles discs,” and “labelling and sealing.” This shows a basic range related to the diagram. However, vocabulary is repetitive and several word choices or spellings make the meaning difficult to understand, including “soils” for silos, “maked,” “chatergorie,” and “thired.” Phrases such as “the storage soils in the loading to flour” are also not natural descriptions of the process. Build a more accurate set of process verbs and nouns, such as “is transported,” “is mixed,” “is shaped,” and “is packaged,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to describe the stages in sequence, but the response relies mainly on simple sentence patterns and does not show a controlled range of structures. Frequent errors in verb forms, articles, agreement, and sentence construction make parts difficult to understand. For example, “ready to cook noodles are maked” has an incorrect verb form, while “The storage soils start in the diagrame” does not form a clear grammatical description. The long final sentence joins many stages without clear sentence boundaries, which further obscures the relationships between them. Practise writing short, accurate passive sentences for process diagrams, such as “The flour is stored in silos” and “Water and oil are added to the mixer,” before combining stages with clear sequencing.

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