Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided diagaram shows the how noodles are manufacture in 8 steps

over it is lucid that how noodles are manufactured in 8 steps

fetching into details the noodles are storage soils in flour than it mix with water and oil in step to after that itin step 3 noodles are dough sheets after that in 4 noodles are dough strips

consedring the remining detail in step 5 noodles discs beside this in step 6 noodles are cooking with oil and drying and moreover noodles were transfer into cups and in step 7 vegetables and species and in last 8 step the noodles were lables on the pcket for sale

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the process as having eight steps and mention several relevant stages, including mixing flour with water and oil, forming sheets and strips, and cooking and drying the noodle discs. However, the account is minimal and some details are inaccurate or unclear: the flour is stored in silos, rather than the noodles being stored, and vegetables and spices are added before the cups are labelled and sealed. The overview largely repeats the number of steps instead of summarising the process from flour storage to finished cups. The response also falls 40 words short of the required minimum, leaving important stages and the final product under-described. To improve, give a clear overview and accurately report the sequence and key inputs.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

The response follows the general order of the process, moving from storage and mixing through shaping and cooking to packaging, so the reader can recognise a basic sequence. However, it is presented as one continuous block, with no clear separation between an overview and the detailed stages. Linking phrases such as “after that,” “beside this,” and “moreover” are repetitive or do not clearly express the relationship between steps. Some transitions also make the sequence confusing, particularly the placement of vegetables and spices after the reference to cups. Use two short paragraphs, organise stages in groups, and rely on precise sequencing language such as “next,” “following this,” and “finally.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

You use some task-related vocabulary, including “mixer,” “dough sheets,” “dough strips,” “noodles discs,” and “drying,” which helps convey the manufacturing process. However, the range is limited and several word choices or spellings make the description difficult to understand: “storage soils” appears to mean “storage silos,” “species” should be “spices,” and “lables on the pcket” is unclear. “Noodles are manufacture” also uses an incorrect word form. Aim for accurate process vocabulary and natural collocations, for example, “flour is stored in silos,” “the dough is cut into strips,” and “the cups are labelled and sealed.” Proofreading spelling and choosing precise verbs will make your meaning clearer.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts to describe a sequence, but sentence structures are very limited and several clauses run together without clear grammatical boundaries. Errors in verb forms and sentence construction appear in phrases such as “noodles are manufacture,” “it mix with water and oil,” and “noodles were transfer into cups.” Articles and agreement are also inconsistent, as in “the how noodles” and “it mix.” These problems sometimes obscure who or what is undergoing each stage. Practise forming accurate passive sentences, which suit process descriptions: “The flour is mixed with water and oil,” followed by “The dough is rolled into sheets.” Use full stops to separate stages and check tense, agreement, and articles.

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