Band 4.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-27

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.0)

this diagram illustrates on how instant noodles being manufactured in a production line.

overall,the process seem to be well organized,from storage silos to seeling labeling.

at first the material gets dumped to the mixer where you add water and oil to be mixed with flour then its transferred through the sheet dough to benf

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 3.0

The response identifies the topic and begins to describe the opening stages, mentioning the silos, mixer, water and oil, and dough sheets. However, it does not provide a complete account of the process or a meaningful overview of its main stages. The description stops mid-sentence at “to benf” and omits the later steps, including forming noodle discs, cooking and drying, adding vegetables and spices, and sealing the cups. The overview, “well organized,” is too general to summarise the process’s key features. The response is also substantially below the required 150 words, leaving the task only minimally addressed. To improve, report the full sequence and give a concise overview of how the process begins and ends.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 4.5

There is a basic attempt to organise the response: an opening sentence is followed by an overview and then a description beginning with “at first.” This gives the reader a simple starting progression. However, the response ends abruptly during the first process stage, so there is no logical development through to the finished product. The overview and process description are not clearly separated into developed paragraphs, and the few linking expressions do not connect a complete sequence. The phrase “then its transferred” signals a next step, but the sentence itself remains unfinished. Use separate paragraphs for the overview and stages, and connect each stage with clear sequencing language such as “subsequently” and “finally”.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

The response uses some relevant process vocabulary, including “production line,” “storage silos,” “mixer,” “water and oil,” and “flour,” showing basic awareness of the topic. However, the range is very limited, and several choices or forms are inaccurate: “seeling labeling” does not clearly express the final packaging stage, while “material” is vague where “flour” would be precise. “Dough sheet” is also expressed in an awkward order, and “benf” appears to be an incomplete or misspelled word. These issues reduce clarity and precision. Build a wider set of accurate process terms, including “dough strips,” “noodle discs,” “cooking and drying,” and “sealing,” and check spelling and word forms carefully.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response attempts a few sentence forms, including an opening statement and a sequence joined with “where” and “then.” However, grammatical control is weak and the final sentence is incomplete, ending with “to benf.” The opening, “this diagram illustrates on how,” uses an unnecessary preposition, and “instant noodles being manufactured” lacks the auxiliary verb needed for a passive construction. In “overall,the process seem,” the subject–verb agreement and punctuation are inaccurate; “then its transferred” also needs a correctly formed passive and apostrophe. Most of the writing relies on simple structures, with little accurate variety. Practise complete passive sentences for process descriptions, such as “The flour is mixed with water and oil,” and check agreement, articles, and sentence endings.

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