Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-30

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The provided diagram illustrates the information how the instant noodles are manufactured

At a glance, it is evidant that. this is a linner process and consists eight steps. it is a man made process. first store the siol in truks and mix with water and oil and passed through the rollers and convert into double sheets. After that it passed remaing steps and finally cups made and labels the cup and added the sealing labelling

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.0

You identify the general subject and recognise that the diagram shows a process, noting that it has eight steps. However, the account is very incomplete: it skips key stages such as forming dough sheets and strips, shaping noodle discs, cooking and drying, and adding vegetables and spices. Some details are also inaccurate or unclear: the flour is stored in silos, not “store[d] … in truks,” and the cups are labelled and sealed rather than “labels the cup and added the sealing labelling.” The overview is too brief to summarise the main stages meaningfully. The response also falls 75 words short of the 150-word minimum, leaving too little space to report the process adequately. Describe the stages in order and include a clear overview of the beginning and end.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to organise the description in process order, using “At a glance,” “first,” “After that,” and “finally.” This gives the reader a rough sense of progression. However, the response is presented as one short block, and the links between stages are often unclear: “After that it passed remaing steps” does not explain what happens next. The opening sentence is separate but does not lead into a developed overview, while the final phrase repeats labelling without clearly completing the sequence. Use a short overview followed by a step-by-step paragraph, and connect each stage with precise sequencing language such as “next,” “then,” and “after cooking.”

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response uses a small set of relevant process words, including “manufactured,” “rollers,” “water and oil,” “steps,” and “labels,” so the topic is generally recognisable. However, the vocabulary is limited and several spelling or word-choice errors make details difficult to understand, including “evidant,” “linner,” “siol,” and “truks.” Phrases such as “double sheets” and “passed remaing steps” do not accurately name or describe the stages shown. Build a more precise process vocabulary, for example “flour,” “dough sheets,” “dough strips,” “noodle discs,” “cook,” “dry,” and “seal.” Check spelling carefully and use the diagram’s labels where possible.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

You attempt to describe a sequence and use a few simple clauses, but the range of sentence structures is very limited and errors are frequent. The opening, “illustrates the information how,” has an incorrect clause pattern; “it is evidant that. this is” contains faulty punctuation and sentence boundaries. Verb forms and agreement are also problematic in “first store the siol … and mix … and passed,” while “finally cups made” lacks a clear verb construction. These errors sometimes make the intended relationships between stages hard to follow. Practise complete passive sentences suited to process descriptions, such as “The flour is mixed with water and oil” and “The cups are then labelled and sealed,” and check articles, verb forms, and punctuation.

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