Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-10-31

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Student answer (Band 4.5)

The diagram shows the instant noodles are manufactured in factore. first of all flour is the main corse. flour are store in the silos and start the proceger. the waler and oil mixed in the flour on the mixer maching of many time. the flour are the rollers of any laier. after this going on the dough sheets. the dough sheets is flat. after this shift on the dough strips.the creat the mixer noodles shape. after the mixer on noodles discs. the noodles cooking in the oil after this drying of noodles many time. a macing noodles pot on the cups. in the noodles mixed vegetables and spices mixed in the cups. after this tases eas good. after this cups inter on the labels macing. labeling and sealing noodles put on the box and crove by a tap ,many lear. in this manu of time and lebores needs is work.

AI examiner evaluation

CriterionBand
Task Achievement / Task Response4.5
Coherence and Cohesion5.0
Lexical Resource4.5
Grammatical Range and Accuracy4.5
Overall4.5

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 4.5

You identify the subject as instant-noodle manufacture and mention several genuine stages, including flour storage, mixing, dough sheets and strips, cooking, drying, and adding vegetables and spices. However, the account is difficult to follow and does not give a clear overview of the process from raw materials to sealed cups. Some details are inaccurate or unsupported: for example, you say the noodles are put “on the box,” whereas the diagram shows cups being labelled and sealed, and “after this tases eas good” is not a process stage shown. Several transitions are also unclear, so the reader cannot reliably reconstruct the sequence. To strengthen the response, summarise the overall start and end points, then report the stages accurately and in order, without adding personal comments or invented details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

There is a basic attempt to present the process in sequence, using markers such as “first of all,” “after this,” and “after this” again. This gives the reader some sense that one stage follows another. However, the response is written as one continuous block, and the repeated transitions create a mechanical rhythm rather than clear progression. Connections between stages are sometimes missing or confusing—for instance, the move from dough strips to noodles discs and then to cups is not clearly explained. Grouping the preparation stages separately from cooking and packaging, and using a wider range of accurate links such as “next,” “once shaped,” and “finally,” would make the sequence easier to follow. Clear sentence boundaries would also help distinguish each stage.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some relevant process vocabulary, including “silos,” “mixer,” “dough sheets,” “dough strips,” “noodles discs,” “vegetables,” and “spices.” These terms show awareness of the diagram’s subject. However, the range is basic and repetitive, and frequent spelling errors—such as “factore,” “proceger,” “maching,” and “lebores”—make several parts hard to understand. Some word choices are also inaccurate or unclear: “the flour are the rollers of any laier” does not communicate the intended action, while “tases eas good” is informal and irrelevant to a process description. Build a bank of accurate manufacturing verbs and check spelling; precise choices such as “is transferred,” “is shaped,” and “is packaged” would improve clarity.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response mainly uses short, simple statements and attempts to connect stages with time expressions. This provides a basic framework, but there is little variety in sentence structure, and frequent grammatical errors sometimes obscure the process. Examples include “flour are store,” “the water and oil mixed,” and “the dough sheets is flat,” where verb forms and subject–verb agreement are not controlled. Articles and sentence boundaries are also inconsistent, as in “on the mixer maching of many time.” Practise forming accurate passive sentences, which are useful for describing processes: “The flour is stored in silos,” followed by “Water and oil are added.” Then link stages with clauses such as “After the dough is rolled into sheets, it is cut into strips.”

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