Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Few of the people says that the advertising is encredibaly succesful to purchase thing which they are bias about and shows that thing. On the other hand, some people not uve attention on that advertisments because it is general and too much long. I believe that some advertisments are very allure in the first and it become boring after seeing too much time.

Firstly, there are such kind of advertisments what are very allur and people get prejudise easily. Also, there are plethora influencers who are pramoting that products so therefor people want this prodct to in their bag. For instance, there are several of beauty products company nowadays such as Dior, Channel, Huda beauty much more. And influencers are promoting the products. SO therefore, people bcome bias about these products. However, there are also advertisment about universities and collages for students and also it is vital for students and they do attention on it because this type of advertisments are very useful for them.

On the other hand, some advertisments are very common which are shows in television like soap, detergant, toothpaste excetra. So therefore, the advertisments are become too much boring for the people and people do not give attention on these advertisments. Although, there are several of advertisments in my country which ae not paying too much concentration from buyer because few of the advertisments are long and boring so people metamorphose easily.

In conclusion, I believe that goverment should that type of advertisments which are significant for people and do not shows that type of advertisment which are awful for people.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

The response discusses both views: it says influencers and attractive product promotions can persuade buyers, while repeated television adverts for everyday goods may become boring and ignored. It also gives a personal view that adverts can initially appeal but lose impact through repetition. However, the position is not fully clear or consistently developed: the conclusion shifts to what the government should show, an idea not established in the discussion, and does not directly restate the writer’s view on advertising’s effectiveness. Examples such as beauty brands and university adverts are relevant, but their connection to the two main claims needs fuller explanation. Develop each view with a clear reason and a specific example, then make the conclusion answer the question directly.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The response has a recognisable structure, with an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion. The contrast between the views is signalled by “On the other hand,” and examples are placed within the relevant discussion. However, progression within paragraphs is often difficult to follow because ideas are joined mechanically or repeated. “So therefore” appears more than once, and the first body paragraph moves from influencers to university adverts without clearly explaining how the latter supports the argument. Some references, such as “that type of advertisements,” are unclear. Use fewer, more accurate linking phrases and organise each paragraph around one claim, followed by explanation and an example.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.0

The response attempts topic-related vocabulary, including “influencers,” “promoting,” “common,” and “boring,” and some choices communicate the intended ideas. However, the range is limited and several inaccurate word choices or collocations make meaning difficult to follow, such as “people get prejudise,” “want this product to in their bag,” and “do attention on it.” Repetition of “advertisements,” “people,” and “boring” also restricts expression. There are frequent spelling errors, including “encredibaly,” “succesful,” “detergant,” and “goverment,” which reduce clarity. Build a reliable set of advertising-related phrases and check spelling; prioritise natural combinations such as “pay attention to an advert” and “influence consumers’ purchasing decisions.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

There are attempts to use both simple and more complex forms, including a contrastive opening and clauses beginning with “because” and “although.” However, sentence structures are often faulty, and errors in agreement, articles, verb forms, and sentence construction frequently make the reader work to understand the point. For example, “Few of the people says” has incorrect agreement, while “the advertisments are become too much boring” combines verb forms incorrectly. “There are such kind of advertisments what are…” also shows problems with number and clause formation. Practise accurate basic sentence patterns first, then add subordinate clauses. Check subject–verb agreement, singular and plural forms, and the use of one main verb in each clause.

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