Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-14

IELTS Writing Task 2 question

Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Student answer (Band 5.0)

several individuals believe that advertising is extremely successful to pressured is to purchase product.other people think that advertising is normal that everyone had not pay attention.

Overall,it can be seen that advertising in on type of bussiness.In contract, through several products people advertice in those products like scanner.in my opinion i believe with the former sentence.my justification will be explained in the upcoming paragraph with relevant example.

To begin with, advertisement is one of the most important thing for those citizens who sells products in online website. In addition, bussineman advertising through like in food products scanner or news paper also some advertising is given in social media as like tv,phone . Moreover, advertisement is also give positive impact on bussiness because via advertising people read there news and think to purchase that product so the product owner get benifits from advertisement.For instant, if the owner put something in online app for selling the product cannot sells because people don't know so owner give advertising to that product on wefers or News paper some audiance read that news and went to purchase that things As a result,both the audiance and the owner get more benefits through advertisement.

on the other hand,other people think that advertisement is common think so we don't have to pay attention on that.to explain, advertisement is normal some people ignore news because sometime in new the author wrote or give fake news that don't related to us.Additionaly,for example,some time we watched intresting movie or series and the advertice is came at the main seen so some people hated and skip that advertice.Furthetmore, rarely people read news or watch news.to explain, sometime the copying news impact bad on the people such as given bad news also waste of time.for instant, if people read that news and do that same way that given in the advertice so it is bad for us.so some citizens don't give pay attention to advertisement.

To conclude, advertising is most beneficial things to famous some company or selling fast some products.In contrast,advertice is easy and common for the bussineman to sell products from home to home.Moreover,in one way advertising is common thing because it os waste of time and it's give bad impact on citizens because bad new and worthless news are written in advertice.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address both views and state a preference for the view that advertising persuades people to buy, so the response is relevant to the question. The first main paragraph explains how advertising can help sellers reach customers, and the second gives reasons some people ignore adverts, including interruptions during films and concerns about misleading information. However, your position is not consistently clear: the introduction says you agree with the first view, while the conclusion gives substantial emphasis to advertising being a waste of time and having a bad impact. Several examples are difficult to interpret, such as the reference to “scanner” and “wefers,” and the ideas about fake news are not clearly connected to advertising. Develop each view with a clearer explanation and a specific, relevant example, then make your opinion consistent throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has an introduction, separate paragraphs for the two views, and a conclusion, which gives it a recognisable overall structure. You also use signposting such as “To begin with,” “on the other hand,” and “To conclude.” However, progression within paragraphs is often unclear, and linking expressions are sometimes repetitive or do not show the relationship between ideas accurately. For example, “In contrast” appears where the sentence does not establish a clear contrast, while “to explain” and “for instant” recur without making the examples easier to follow. Some sentences combine several points, making it hard to see which idea supports the main claim. Organise each body paragraph around one central point, explain it, and then add one clearly connected example; use pronouns and transitions with clear references.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some topic-related vocabulary, including “advertising,” “purchase,” “social media,” “benefits,” and “ignore,” and you attempt to express ideas about both businesses and consumers. However, the range is limited and many word choices or collocations are inaccurate, which sometimes makes the meaning difficult to understand. Examples include “advertising is normal think,” “famous some company,” and “the copying news impact bad.” Spelling errors such as “bussineman,” “benifits,” and “intresting” also reduce clarity. Some words are repeated frequently, particularly “advertisement” and “news.” Build a more accurate set of phrases for discussing persuasion and attention, and check spelling and word forms. More precise vocabulary would help you explain your examples without relying on unclear expressions.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You attempt both simple and longer sentences, including clauses introduced by “because,” “if,” and “so,” and the reader can identify the broad topic and your two main viewpoints. However, the range of structures is limited, and complex sentences are often faulty. For example, “people don't know so owner give advertising to that product” has problems with articles, agreement, and clause connection; “some people don't give pay attention” also has an incorrect verb pattern. Errors with verb forms, singular and plural nouns, articles, and sentence boundaries occur throughout, and punctuation is inconsistent, as in the run-on example beginning “For instant, if the owner…” Practise building shorter, complete sentences first, then combine them accurately using one subordinate clause at a time. Check subject–verb agreement and punctuation when editing.

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