Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 5.5)
There is an ongoing debate regarding mostly people are believe that advertising is a upper level of success to convincing someone to buy anything. also other peoples believe that the way of advertising method is so common way of people attention However , others argue that, this is very common way of advertising. Therefore ahead of my opinion , both the views will discussed further .
Examining the former opinion , the primary argument the supporters would put forward if one person open a new brand so they went to sell the product in this condition they follow different strategy of selling products. one thing is advertising a brand product they different way adopt of advertising like they add in tv in the brand also they add in newspapers online apps like instagram page and TikTok etc.In addition, they also believe that the advertising method is so old and common in this modern world. The reason of behind is online work , the online work also based of advertising and product selling work
On the contrary ,those in favour of the latter opinion have their own arguments.To begin with claim that others person advertising in the modern world is no longer way of customers attention. This method of advertising is so common. For instance , online work.
To conclude ,and offer my position , there are convincing arguments both for against of advertising of buy thing and pay attention. I think so people also use the laptop mobile phone and also connected the social page so there is no need to advertising . just post the brand page in different social media page.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses both views, but the development of ideas is limited and often unclear. The introduction is confusing, and the arguments presented in the body paragraphs lack depth and logical progression. For instance, the explanation of why advertising is 'common' is repetitive and fails to clearly distinguish between the two perspectives requested by the prompt. The conclusion attempts to state a position, but it is vague and does not effectively summarize the arguments. To improve, you should focus on clearly stating your position in the introduction and providing distinct, well-supported reasons for each viewpoint in separate paragraphs.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The essay lacks a clear logical flow. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the transitions between sentences are often mechanical or confusing, such as the abrupt shift in the introduction: 'However , others argue that, this is very common way of advertising.' The use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes inaccurate, which makes the progression of ideas difficult to follow. The referencing is also unclear at times, particularly in the second body paragraph. To improve, focus on using transition words more naturally and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that guides the reader through your argument.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary range is quite limited and repetitive. You rely on basic words like 'common', 'advertising', and 'work' throughout the text. There are also several instances of awkward word choice and collocation errors, such as 'upper level of success to convincing' and 'no longer way of customers attention'. These errors occasionally impede the clarity of your message. To reach a higher band, you should aim to incorporate more precise vocabulary related to the topic, such as 'consumer behavior', 'ubiquitous', 'persuasive', or 'marketing strategies', and work on using these words in their correct grammatical context.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The essay contains frequent grammatical errors that often affect readability. There are issues with subject-verb agreement ('people are believe'), sentence structure (run-on sentences and fragments), and missing articles or prepositions. Many sentences are poorly constructed, making it difficult to discern the intended meaning, such as 'The reason of behind is online work'. While there is an attempt to use complex structures, they are often faulty. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction, ensuring correct verb tenses, and proofreading for common errors like missing articles and incorrect word order.
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