Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-08
IELTS Writing Task 2 question
Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Student answer (Band 4.5)
In modern time advertising part of a life. Number of people believe that advertising is highly successful at persuading us to buy thing. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attrecetive to it. I stande with give first statement why because advertising is very helpful know the offer and disscount.
To Begin with advertising is helpful and part of our life. A main reason of people seen that advertising so their know that shop and know dicssount and after that purchesing so it is really helpful their life. As a result advertising very benificel fo human.
In counclusion, that type of advertising nice and more benifets to people
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 4.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 4.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 4.5 |
| Overall | 4.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 4.0
The response fails to meet the minimum word count requirement of 250 words, reaching only 114 words. Consequently, the ideas are severely underdeveloped. While you attempt to address both views and state a position, the arguments are superficial and lack the necessary supporting evidence or examples required for an academic essay. The task is only partially addressed because the brevity prevents a full exploration of the prompt. To improve, you must expand your arguments with specific examples and logical explanations to meet the length requirement.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The essay is organized into three very short paragraphs, but the progression of ideas is disjointed. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas effectively. Phrases like 'To Begin with' and 'In counclusion' are used, but the internal logic within the paragraphs is weak. The sentences are often repetitive and lack the necessary flow to guide the reader through a coherent argument. Improved use of linking words and better paragraph structure are essential for a higher score.
Lexical Resource — Band 4.5
The vocabulary is very limited and repetitive, which restricts your ability to express complex ideas. There are numerous spelling errors throughout the text, such as 'attrecetive' (attention), 'disscount' (discount), 'purchesing' (purchasing), and 'benificel' (beneficial). These errors, combined with the basic word choice, make the writing difficult to follow at times. You need to focus on learning accurate spelling and expanding your range of vocabulary to include more academic terms related to the topic of advertising.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 4.5
The grammatical range is very limited, consisting mostly of simple sentence structures. There are frequent errors in basic grammar, including missing articles ('advertising part of a life'), incorrect verb forms ('people seen that'), and word order issues ('I stande with give first statement'). These errors are persistent and often impede the clarity of your message. To improve, you should practice basic sentence construction, subject-verb agreement, and the correct use of articles and prepositions.
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